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Written by fellpony
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17 January 2007 |
Long ago and far away, but I still suffer from this as I guess most people do - perhaps more so nowadays! - the hasty comment triggering the hasty reply.
Your matchbox-worth of mathematics Stunned and destroyed me; Hurled down my helpless heart, Whirled my world into wilderness And struck out the star my stumbling Feet had followed. I failed to find Help or hope within a holocaust. And you wondered that my tongue ran fire. |
Written by Fledermaus (3246 comments posted) 17th January 2007 | Without the introduction I wouldn't have guessed the meaning I'm afraid. E-mail is not a good way to talk about serious things...
Nice poem. Although I'm not sure about the word 'holocaust', as that is associated with such an enormous tragedy that I'd always be reluctant to use it for anything but that specific tragedy, but that's just a personal opinion...
Putting in the very last line was smart. It underlines the misunderstanding. | Hi fellpony
Written by jean.day (2266 comments posted) 17th January 2007 | I somehow think that your emailer got as much as he gave. You make it sound like his message was devastating to you - but you liken your reply to arson, unless I am reading it wrong.
I enjoyed reading it. | e mail NOT, ha ha
Written by fellpony (1603 comments posted) 17th January 2007 | I wrote this LONG before E mail or even the Internet was invented. It was a face to face exchange ... I'll take that "e" word out of the author intro, I think!
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Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 17th January 2007 | The last line of this is really really good. I liked the alliteration but felt by the end that maybe there was a tad too much of it. Liked it very much, describes the feeling very well
Elli |
Written by Phil (6683 comments posted) 17th January 2007 | As I was reading I was enjoying the alliteraton, but by the end, as Elli, I felt you'd over cooked it just a little.
With Elli again, last line great.
Phil. |
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