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Written by fellpony
17 January 2007
I wrote this a long time ago but it came back to me after watching "Monster" and reading about the Ipswich killings recently.

She sat as anyone might have sat
on the empty bench outside the city wall,
smoking, to ease the tension of her hands.
She might have passed for any one of us
but, like the respectable city, catering
for visitors, we did not look at her;
passed, gossiping, inside. I saw her later
casually cadge a light from a stranger
with more than necessary looks and words.

She
is catering for passing trade;
their acknowledgement has broken her face
into a lividly-shaded mask, grotesque,
unbalanced by bruises.

She looks with scorn at the naivety
she's not long lost herself; she sits
outside the city wall to ply her trade.
Between her fingers is a burning stub
and in her eyes the wariness of the fox.


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Written by ellipinnock (1786 comments posted) 17th January 2007
mmm powerful piece and, as you say, topical given recent events. Wasnt sure about the repetition of catering. Liked it. 
 
Elli

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 17th January 2007
I really like this. It has a certain impact and power. I can't decide whether it's poetic prose or prose-like verse. Perhaps it doesn't matter as I enjoyed it anyway. 
 
Phil.
:)
Written by pandora (15 comments posted) 18th January 2007
I enjoyed this piece from beginning to end. 
 
I liked the use of the word "catering" 
 
shhhhhhhh :grin

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