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Winter Blue
By roxyhope
19 January 2007
Tear beaten crests
accentuate
Almond anguish
and
Melancholy
rests in the sway of the weeping willow
Distraught
is the feverish wind
That entwines auburn locks into
the |Dance of Sorrow|
Weathered emotions
play against the drums of
Tranquility
causing dismay within her

Like the
bittersweet grapefruit,
Life antagonizes her...
Love's sweet juices
lace her kissable lips
yet
The bitterness of anger
touches her soul
Sweet,
miserable
bliss......

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Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 19th January 2007
Liked the 'bitterweet grapefruit' - nice simile.  
 
Some odd line breaks in here - for example putting 'and' and 'yet' on lines of their own. For me, personally (and this may well just be me), it came across a little overwritten in places - especially the beginning. 
 
I liked the four lines following on from 'distraught' - left me with a strong image. 
 
Elli
Oh my
Written by wattle (117 comments posted) 19th January 2007
A down and blue Ms Roxy, --- My excuse/take for your mood. I should say you paint a hash cold scene to walk alone through, with a hole in one shoes. I like, Ms Roxyhope, thank you. (Summer is soon to shine, I'm hoping/thinking) -- 8)

Written by Toad (100 comments posted) 19th January 2007
well, it's a good poem for January... 
this piece has a lot of style, and your creativity waltzes the reader down the page.

Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 20th January 2007
I liked this. The linebreaks are indeed in odd places, but I presume that's on purpose and I must say that it worked for me. It seems to put emphasis on those short words.

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