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(from) Lady
By wattle
19 January 2007
wattle - no one special, just a dreamer who found an old pen.
Lady with a sick leg

I slipped
I fell
I broke my leg
I wasn’t being silly

They took me off to Hospital
They screwed me back together
They put a cast upon my leg
They told me that was better

They didn’t feed me for two days
They told me to stay still
They put a cage around my bed
They gave me yucky pills

Now I’m getting better
I’ve learned to hobble round
I love to plan my outings
I love my feet upon the ground

I want to say g’day
We talk like that down here
I want to wish the very best, to Natalie,
If can get a ticket I’ll rub behind her ear

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Written by Toad (100 comments posted) 19th January 2007
sweet, I especially liked the fourth stanza.  
I don't understand the ending. Also, I believe there is a pronoun missing in the last line.

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 19th January 2007
What have you been doing to that poor dog? Some uncle you turned out to be...I bet you've got pieces of teddy bear buried under your patio as well havent you? 
 
Elli 
 
:grin
Thank you - Mr Toad, Ms Elli
Written by wattle (117 comments posted) 19th January 2007
Thank you Toad, it’s kind of you to spare a minute to read my scribble.  
 
I’ll explain. I’m a read-only poet. I don’t for the life of me write it. However some time ago a friend of a friend, asked me to write a poem to cheer-up her pre-teenage Niece, Natalie, who was in hospital, overseas. The poem is quite the collector item (from my perspective). It’s the only poem I have ever written and believe me I don’t feel any more in the making. I’m sure Natalie thought it was the kind of thing an Aunty would like/send. 
 
Ms Elli, Lady is all better now; she tore a hamstring some time ago. Very expensive little dog. Shame on you thinking we do in teddy bears around here (you have given me quite an idea for a story – as soon as I finish my teary ‘Woman’s Weekly Contest’ Entry. – I’ll share some murderous thoughts. (Thank you – for being kind). 

Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 19th January 2007
Nice bit of scribble. The simple tone worked really well. Tell Lady I'm really impressed with her writing. I hope she's cheered up now too, she looks down-right miserable in this picture. 
 
Phil.

Written by Fledermaus (3238 comments posted) 20th January 2007
Sweet indeed. The tone reminded me a little of the poems such as they are in the 'for kids' section of this site, which is meant as a compliment, for those are usually amongst the best. 
And a funny choice for a POV. A poetic dog :grin

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