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By Witzl
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20 January 2007 |
This is short! The writing task here was to write a short story with hook, characters, plot, ending, etc., all in 100 words. I don't think anything I've written heretofore has taken me more time, and I'm still not satisfied. But what a great exercise to help a writer curb long-windedness.
His Girl When you strike lucky, you don’t do deep soul-searching, do you? You say to yourself Why shouldn’t I have this? not This is too good for me. She was his gift from God and he never once questioned why she’d come to him, this intelligent, beautiful treasure, nor why she loved him so fiercely. ‘Guess I must’ve done something right,’ he joked to cynical friends who expressed amazement at his good fortune. In his heart of hearts, he must've known she wasn't his, the foolish man: she didn't resemble him in the slightest.
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very good
Written by johniebg (538 comments posted) 19th January 2007 | this is so good. Your right, getting something under 100 words with everything you accomplish is more difficult than anyone would ever imagine until they try it but you have pulled it off, brilliantly.
Not really much to complain about here on the wasted words front  , you even managed a twist. |
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 20th January 2007 | There was me opening this expecting a good long read for a saturday morning! So I got a surprise...but a good one. Liked the twist, lots of info packed in, good adjective choices along the way. I liked it very much
Elli |
Written by Phil (6683 comments posted) 20th January 2007 | | Well you met the brief very well. Good set up, good twist, enjoyed. Phil. |
Written by Fledermaus (3246 comments posted) 21st January 2007 | | That's realy a SHORT story. Poor man... Well done, setting a scene in so few words. |
Written by coosh (850 comments posted) 22nd January 2007 | | All of the above. As you say, being succinct can be extremely hard work, but this was well worth your time. |
Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 22nd January 2007 | | Thank you very much everyone. I am going to make this into a longer story, and it will be a tremendous relief. I find that having to keep the words I use to a minimum is excruciating. |
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