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Poetry
Friends
By milz
20 January 2007
actually, this poem i'm about to share is made by my friends and i.. we were able to turn it into a song. I dedicate this to one of them.

Friend, everytime we see each other
We take a walk ang laugh together
You brighten up my day my friend

But now, we haven't seen each other lately
So now I feel so sad and lonely
I hope this sad moment would now end

Cause now I see its tearing apart
It's breaking my lonely heart
It's like a dream that wakes me up with a fright in my mind

What has happened to us?
Where's the old you and me?
I only wish that we could be together again
Why is this happening to us?
I want the old you and me
If only I could put us together again

Friend, I want to see you here beside me
If only you know how I want it to be
I'm scared to be alone without you

When you're here, I feel complete, I feel so happy
No need to speak, no need to worry
But now you're gone, I'm nothing without you

This moment is a time to be sad
I'm feeling so lonely, lonely, lonely
I'm wondering where's my friend that I had
I wish that you were here so badly

...If only I could put us together again...

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Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 20th January 2007
If you were able to turn it into a song, I'm pretty sure the rythm must be OK, but I have been counting the syllables and I am a bit surprised, for I can't find the structure. 
 
The content is nice, but I'm a bit puzzled by the style, especially since I must have missed something as you appearantly put it to music.

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