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Dreaming Tonight
By milz
20 January 2007
I made this poem during a gloomy night. I thought of writing a poem because I feel I can express my feelings during the boring night.




Stars sparkling brightly in the sky
Meteors falling down from the heavens
The moon shining above the horizon
Gleaming like a giant pearl by the sea
Souls of our ancestors looking before us
Celestial bodies revolving around
As I gaze outside my window
I saw God's creation before me
Trees swaying, birds chirping, flowers blooming
While I was listening to nightingales' sweet songs
I feel I need to start my dreams tonight
Calming myself to have a good night sleep
I feel a yawn coming out from my mouth
I began to rest my head down to start dreaming tonight

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Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 19th January 2007
erm... hi!! hehe.. :D niway.. yeah.. you got a typo.. in the third line.. 'Th' should be "the" right? :D okay.. 
 
and then the second to the last line.. maybe you can add 'a' before yawn.. it'll make it better. :D 
 
rilLie 
 
ps. yey! tapos na test!!! 
and yeah.. :D
haha...:D..e1 ko..but you know wat?
Written by milz (35 comments posted) 19th January 2007
haha..rillie... :grin

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