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By Phil
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21 January 2007 |
Today I had a brief image of Andrea Robinson, infant school, early seventies. First Love
Until the day
She sneezed across the classroom
And a lump of sputum slid
Across the parquet floor
Like a translucent slug,
I loved her.
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Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 20th January 2007 | Aw Phil - so fickle! Liked - especially the translucent slug line - I was found devouring a slug as a toddler...unfortunately not a tranlsucent one! Not sure it;s a memory I wanted to be reminded of...but enjoyed the piece anyway
Elli
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Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 21st January 2007 | | ack!! Phil's got a girlfriend!! lol.. only kidding, Phil.. really sweet and funny. great work. :D | I'd call this
Written by tabarejos (21 comments posted) 22nd January 2007 | | uhm, nice and nasty at the same time. Like I've seen it happen before. |
Written by Fledermaus (3238 comments posted) 22nd January 2007 | | Heheh... She's got to have manner eh? Nice poem. |
Written by Songster (52 comments posted) 26th January 2007 | | Was she your teacher? |
Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 26th January 2007 | No, just another six year old.
Thanks for all your comments.
Phil. | Hi Phil
Written by jean.day (2257 comments posted) 27th January 2007 | Great fun. I am looking forward to reading all of these.
I do think that true love would excuse the odd bit of slug. |
Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 31st January 2007 | brilliant first poem! Look forward to the rest!
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Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 31st January 2007 | Oh God, Phil -- I've just found this. I should have gone back to see what your earlier loves were after I read the last ones!
Such an image -- like a translucent slug -- but that is exactly what certain phlegm looks like, particularly when one is well into a cold and all the mucous membranes are sloughing off .... and now I know that I will never see another light brown slug again without thinking of poor wee Andrea.
I once fell out of love with a boy when I saw him pick something off his face and pop it into his mouth. And the debris in question was nowhere near his lips. |
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