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By Phil
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21 January 2007 |
Infant school, early seventies. First Love #2 Diane She used tie my shoe laces.
I used to stroke her hair
As she knelt at my feet. We used to walk home
Together at lunchtime,
And then she kissed me.
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Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 21st January 2007 | Liking these Phil. Same kind of tone as your school poems - which works as a formula for me.
Elli | As always
Written by tabarejos (21 comments posted) 22nd January 2007 | As always the"used to" sounds so sad. =) I liked it.
I really tend to like shorter poems, the ones so simple and innocent, yet disturbing at night. |
Written by Fledermaus (3238 comments posted) 22nd January 2007 | Heheh... I'm curious how many of these we'll get. Looking forward to First Love # 1000 :P
Enjoyable poems. |
Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 22nd January 2007 | really enjoyable. ditto to the above  |
Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 31st January 2007 | | will be interesting to see them all put together. Brook . |
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