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Poetry
Kushmu
By maipenrai
22 January 2007
This is a dream I had whilst working in Kosova, the dream was in Serbo-Croat !!!!!
I nether speak nor understand Serbo-Croat, the only explanation I have for such a weird dream is that we were working long, long hours and working under a lot of pressure

The Soldier standing on the Border
saw them coming,
the American Tanks,
he alerts his comrades in the factory
he want's to fight
his comrades to surrender,
they beat him.

he is standing in a village,
a dark place, a place of massacre, of evil
I could sense this in the dream,
he stands in pools of his own blood
the blood spurting from the place
his arms used to be.

he is lay down on wet muddy ground
his stumps spurting his life blood into the mud
a figure kneels and paints lines of blood and mud
across his chest,
then they burn him.

I want to leave, to wake up, no more of this,
the Soldier is shouting "Kushmu, Kushmu",
I can see children crossing a stream
running
to watch the Soldier burn,
I leave,
I can still hear the Soldier screaming "Kushmu, Kushmu.


I was informed by two friends, one Albanian, one Croat that the word KUSHMU means
Nightmare in Serbo-Croat.

Reviews

Written by Fledermaus (3489 comments posted) 22nd January 2007
A strong and dark message, but I'm not sure if it's poetry. I'm also curious, who injured the soldier? The Americans or his comrades? 
 
How strange to have a dream in a language you don't know and then to hear that the words indeed meant something. You must unconsciously have picked up more Serbo-Croat than you thought.
the dream
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 22nd January 2007
I think ! that the the soldier must have been a Serb, at the time there was conflict between NATO Forces and the Serbs, it's the only thing I can think of, re picking up Serbo-Croat? maybe but I was not working with Serbs and we only had one Croat doctor in our team.
the dream
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 22nd January 2007
I think ! that the the soldier must have been a Serb, at the time there was conflict between NATO Forces and the Serbs, it's the only thing I can think of, re picking up Serbo-Croat? maybe but I was not working with Serbs and we only had one Croat doctor in our team.

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 22nd January 2007
'm not sure if it's poetry either, but it's certainly vivid and powerful. Who's to say what is or isn't. This does a very effective job.  
 
I wonder if you've considered 'adapting' your dreams to make them fit a form or structure. Woud it matter if they didn't stick to the 'truth' of your subconscious? 
 
Another good one. 
 
Phil.
The Dream
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 23rd January 2007
Thanks guys for your comments, I think I will change the title of this to Kushmu. 
 
Bernie
The Dream
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 23rd January 2007
Thanks guys for your comments, I think I will change the title of this to Kushmu. 
 
Bernie

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