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Paper Chain Sweethearts
By ellipinnock
22 January 2007
Bit of an experiment this - the last line was the heading to a spam message I got this morning - so I thought it might be fun to try and incorporate it into a poem. This is a result although personally I think I could probably drop the inspiration line!

A wrinkled sheet of sugar paper
smudged with fingerprints
where you creased
and folded
and creased and folded
and launched the plane above my head
where I could not reach.

Stiff, clean cardboard
scored and folded
with cleaner, larger fingertips.
An immaculate boat that sails
proudly away from us only to catch
and bob in the shallows.

Your scissors cut my paper
so I must chase downstream
snagging dirty knees on brambles
to free our boat.

Together we collect paper:
certificates, rental contracts,
rejection letters, job offers
and for me, a drawerful of paper roses,
one for every year.

Twenty roses later
and it is my scissors that tear
into the Tesco value scribble
that tells me you love another.
My scissors that shred
and scatter our paper memories
ready for my self-loathing vacuum cleaner.

Reviews
Don't drop it
Written by Fledermaus (3448 comments posted) 22nd January 2007
The last line is great, don't drop it. It adds a light touch to this poem, although it'd be more realistic to throw them in the bin than to suck them up with a vacuum cleaner, but still it seems to fit well. 
It's funny how the first four stanzas paint an innocent picture and it is one line (" that tells me you love another") which makes it serious.

Written by Phil (6845 comments posted) 22nd January 2007
The last line almost comes out of nowhere, but I thnk you should keep it for its surreal value. 
 
Seriously, liked it all,but thought the last two verses very, very good. (Even with a despondent household tool! -There might be another piece in this you know.) 
 
Phil.
what a nice poem ellipinock!
Written by milz (35 comments posted) 23rd January 2007
:grin

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 23rd January 2007
There are so many nice images here -- the often creased-and-folded sugar paper, the paper airplane sailing overhead, the scissors-and- paper game, the shared documents, and the drawerful of paper roses showing the passing of time. And a self-loathing vacuum cleaner sounds like a real winner, and I wish someone would hurry up and invent one. 
 
Lovely poem, Elli.

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3450 comments posted) 23rd January 2007
I won't pretent to fully understand it but I loved all the images you conjured up and you do have a way with imaginative metaphors which really are your forte 
cheers 
J

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