Great Writing - Home > Poetry > my puppy died
READING ROOM
Great Writing - Home
Read and review others' work
Articles on writing
Advice from the community
COMMUNITY
Talk to others in the forums
Events and Competitions
GW News
ABOUT GREAT WRITING
All About Us
Contact Us
WORK AWAITING REVIEW
GW IS...
Great Writing creative writing community is designed to prompt ideas and provide inspiration and motivation within aspiring and amateur authors. Whatever your topic; from love poetry to Doctor Who or Harry Potter fan fiction, Great Writing's online writing group is where you can make new friends and improve your creative writing.
WHO'S ONLINE
We have 1777 guests online and 3 members online
Poetry
my puppy died
By maipenrai
16 June 2005
i have a thing about accepting responsibilty for your own actions, I hate this blame culture we seem to have nowdays

I was a good lad my mum said

until I was ten

my puppy died when i was ten

 

twelve years old

i drank and smoked

smashed up cars and got my dope

by fourteen i was in the gang

the no-hopers, that was us

stealing cars, causing grief

raped the girl about that time

just a game we no-hopers played

just a game

 

sweet sixteen was mugging time

dear old ladies were the best

to see the fear in their eyes

brought tears of joy to mine

sto;e a car, hit a girl

high on drugs and booze

Mother and Child i killed them both

but not my fault

my puppy died when i was ten

Reviews
chillingly simple; extraordinarily power
Written by alandavidpritchard (59 comments posted) 16th June 2005
I got goosebumps reading this. 
Never happened with a poem before. 
'Nuff said - most impressive
thanks
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 16th June 2005
thanks for your comments
Very Impressive
Written by LaughterLines (34 comments posted) 19th June 2005
I found this piece very disturbing yet impressive. You have written this well and it sent shivers down my spine. 
You are indeed correct by saying everyone is responsible for their own actions. Excellent poem indeed. 
 
LL
Thanks
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 20th June 2005
Thanks LL for your comments  
Bernie

   Only registered users can rate and write comments.
   Please login or register.

Powered by AkoComment 2.0!

 Previous item   Next item