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Poetry
Figs
By alandavidpritchard
16 June 2005

I grew up in Cape Town, South Africa, where we refer to days where the sun shines while it rains as "monkeys'  weddings".

Please note: this is not an autobiographical poem: I have only ever been to my brothers' weddings.


Figs

Remember when, you probably won't -
not that it's too long ago,
that funny sunny faraway day
when things were just perfect and everything smelled of
cheap after-shave?
You probably don't -
we shared rude jokes,
mine, silly; yours, needing to be explained.


And when it rained, remember that? Remember
the spit of summer showers - the monkey's wedding,
you said, that's what they call it, ‘cos it happens at the same time,
like our getting a hiding after stealing -
was it figs? - you know I think it was, figs,
there's a funny word,
like friend. Figs - and God it hurt,
that hiding,
that beating for telling others I saw you cry.
Although I never said a word about the wet pants, I swear.


And remember when we went off to university?
You grew up so fast. But you still told me things,
like why God doesn't exist, and why, when things go wrong,
there's usually someone to blame, like the government.
And remember when they locked you up? When you
carried that rude banner protesting about
something I can't remember.
And all because you were bunking off lectures.
I can't forget
that it was me you called instead of your folks.


Remember, nah - I know there's no point,
I was your best man at both your weddings,
and I was really happy for you, twice.
And remember when I told you about my boyfriend James,
remember that day? When it rained while the sun shone,
when you nodded  while I went on and on,
like you probably do now about your grandchildren.
Who can remember?
There's nowt so queer as folk.


Yet, I cannot believe that you have forgotten
the very last day that we ever spoke.


© Alan David Pritchard

Reviews
once again...
Written by umbugjug (46 comments posted) 16th June 2005
...you have used beautiful imagery to put across something which i would imagine is very personal to you.  
and once again it is very moving.  
this merits re-reading and re-reading. and every time the ending gets me.

Written by alandavidpritchard (58 comments posted) 16th June 2005
thanks for your comments - you should know that this poem is not personal to me, the "you" person does not exist nor has existed in my life....the poem began with the lines remember when and it sort of grew from there...i like doning that - creating a fictitious character in my head and then letting that character speak.  
Thanks for your response. It is always gratifying to know that one's work has an impact - even for a wider audience.

Written by umbugjug (46 comments posted) 16th June 2005
sorry, i didn't explain myself very well. i didn't mean that this was from your specific experience. it just sounded as though the "you" character's reaction to the narrator telling him about james was something you had come across, albeit not in this actual way.

Written by maj (20 comments posted) 16th June 2005
 
Alan you out do yourself again.  
 
I like the way you have created the nostaligic feeling through the images/memories.There is a sense of innocence,which i find is balanced well with the harsh reality of the last verse.  
 
Acceptance is thing everyone strives for but rarely achieve i believe.  
 
:sigh  
 
A sad but great peice of work.
feelings
Written by sheppard (36 comments posted) 16th June 2005
I truely like this, and although it is fictional I can relate to it in so many ways, it made me remember things long forgotton! 
Thank you your expression is so clear. 
Well done. :)

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