Perhaps a bit clumsy, but it's hard writing poetry while constantly having to look up words in a dictionary ;-)
Mo rùin, bhoireannach àlainn, (My love, beautiful woman)
Tha cuimhne mhaith agam ort (I have a good memory of you)
I recall your pleasant smile
Your soft hand was in mine
As we walked the Royal Mile
Sweet memories, all was fine
The pipers played 'The Flower'
And were soaked by Scottish rain
We were in that shower
There on that medieval lane
Sùilean gorm, gruag bhàn (Blue eyes, blonde hair)
Beannachd leat, a charaid (Farewell, oh friend)
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Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 25th January 2007 |
Nice snap shot. I'm not sure beautiful woman and pleasant smile really go together too well, but that may just be me.
Liked.
Phil. |
Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 25th January 2007 |
I liked this a lot. Sets such lovely scene and has a very delicate feel to it.
Best wishes,
E |
Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 26th January 2007 |
| Thanks Phil and JAN :-) |
Evocative
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 26th January 2007 |
I really liked this Batty, perhaps the Edinburgh references - I could visualize it well.
Nice gentle piece of word painting.
Oli  |
Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 26th January 2007 |
Thanks Oli.
And of course it's great to hear that the Scots on this site liked this too (I think JAN is from Scotland too right?) |
Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 26th January 2007 |
This reminds me a little of Willy Nelson's 'Blue Eyes Crying in the Rain.'
Another person in Scotland who likes your poem, Fledermaus! I am impressed that you are learning Gaelic, too. How many languages do you speak, for pity's sake? |
Yes..
Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 26th January 2007 |
I'm from Scotland, although not fully Scottish I'm afraid - only half way there! And I'm sorry to say that I don't speak a word of Gaelic though I wish I did.
Cheers,
E |
Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 28th January 2007 |
Thanks Witzl.
I don't realy speak that much languages... Dutch of course, and English and some German. Considering my high school exams I am suposed to know French too, but I doubt if I could have a conversation in that language.
And I'm trying to learn some Irish, Welsh and Mandarin Chinese, but that's all still very much in the beginners-fase. For the Gaelic sentences in this poem I had to look up most words, because they're all slightly different from Irish (which I don't know all too well either)...
JAN,
I knew it from your non-fiction piece about the 'Little Princess'. Guess you're as Scottish as I am Dutch then 
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Phil you cynic!!!
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 28th January 2007 |
I'm sure there are plenty of beautiful women out there with pleasant smiles!
Liked this 'maus - very sweet, gentle piece and kudos to you for sticking the ol' gaelic in there.
Elli |
Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 29th January 2007 |
| Thanks Elli. Funny eh, that a language with so many strange and gutteral sounds can still sound pretty? |
Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 29th January 2007 |
| Elli, you are right about pretty women and smiles. There are pretty women who pout and pretty women who put on sultry looks, but I'll bet you anything there are far more who smile. I sure as hell would. |
o raibh mhaith agat. thank you
Written by Marybarry (237 comments posted) 30th January 2007 |
Thank you for such a beautiful poem.
I only remember a little of the auld tongue ,
In songs and poems.
In my fathers time the auld tongue was used.
You speak german. I believe I write better in German.
Would you review a short piece for me??
marybarry |
Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 21st February 2007 |
Thanks Patricia. I don't know that much Gaelic realy.
I do know some German, but it's not my native tongue and I'm probably worse at German that at English, but I could have a look at it. |
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