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By alandavidpritchard
16 June 2005
Was going to call this E=MC squared, but I think this title works better.

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I'll tell you what does hurt, says the man
with the tattoo on his lips,
the man with the safety pin through his eyelid - this,
and he shows me a scar where a nipple
should have been, points to a picture of a girl,
of a weird earring.
That's nothing, says the anorexic whose husband
left her for someone thinner, whose fridge
is full of rotting food, whose certificates
from a school of gourmet cooking still
cling to the walls - let me show you
the mother of a girl whose unborn child
is dead inside her, then we'll talk
about misery.  Well done,
says another, that gets me right there -
and she coughs, trying to get the fly
out of the hole in her throat. It's
my turn. I feel incompetent. All
I have, I say, is this, holding up
a poem about a cat up a tree, about
a little boy's tears and the cold hungry wind.


First, nothing - then,
That'll do, they say, leading
me by the hand to where it's warm.

(c) Alan David Pritchard

Reviews
ha
Written by maipenrai (780 comments posted) 16th June 2005
bloody excellent mate
masterful
Written by kevinrobson73 (371 comments posted) 19th June 2005
top visual imagery 
performance piece?

Written by Cherry26 (10 comments posted) 5th July 2005
I like this. The imagery is wonderful and the flow works nicely.

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