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First Love #5 Karen (Beaky)

By Phil

25 January 2007

High School, early eighties.

First Love #5 Karen (Beaky)

Bitch extraordinaire.
I never dared tell her,
But really,
I fancied her friend,
Pam.
Not only did she have
A smaller nose,
She was lovely with it.

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Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 25th January 2007

The style seems differnt from the other four. It's nice but I think the others were better.

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 25th January 2007

I agree. I nearly made it all up just to make it better - but I didn't. Ridiculous though it may sound, This little journey (for Lazy Writers) is all true.

Phil.

Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 25th January 2007

Another nice one. I love the last line - it gives it that light and innocent quality.

E

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 26th January 2007

I loved the last line, too. :grin

with Fledermaus on this one.. the others were, for me, better. XD

Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 26th January 2007

Ah yes, what a sly child! You toyed with Karen's emotions in order to get closer to Pam!

You learned early how to play the game Mr. Phil!

What's wrong with big noses anyway?

Oli

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 26th January 2007

Interestingly enough, most Americans, I believe, would interpret your use of 'with it' to mean not 'in addition to' but 'using it.' So if I had not spent six years in the U.K. I would be wondering what kinky thing it was Karen did with her nose to make it so memorable. I am curious as to whether there are any other Americans out there who have read this and wondered about that use of 'with it.' Anyone brave enough to fess up?

Funny poem, Phil!

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 27th January 2007

I liked this one Phil - one of the best so far IMO - made even better by witzl's fantastic comment about wondering what karen did with her nose!!! Loved the subversive undertone...

Elli

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