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First Love #7 Kathryn

By Phil

28 January 2007

High school, early eighties.

Not too many more. Trying to get them out before the end of the month for Lazy Writers.

First Love #7 Kathryn

Mad -
And mean.
She hurt for fun.
An ant under her glass,
I’d squirm and crawl to safety
Or be caught in her fiery gaze and shrivel.

But there were compensations.

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Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 28th January 2007

This made me smile - what a sly last line - I guess the compensations would have had to be good

Penultimate line is also a cracker. Interesting idea of yours this...enjoying the journey!

Elli

Written by Fledermaus (3448 comments posted) 28th January 2007

Another experiment? It looks nice, this triangle of letters making up a poem. I can see why this love didn't last too long though

Written by kevg (45 comments posted) 28th January 2007

Nice job Phil.

Like Fledermaus said, the triangular effect in the words is pretty neat.

The last line has got a good subtle punch to it too.

An enjoyable read all round.

Cheers,
KevG

Written by Talisker (1328 comments posted) 28th January 2007

A great series. Are these all real? Does your missus know what a Casanova you were at school?

Written by Phil (6836 comments posted) 28th January 2007

All real and completely true. I've avoided any poetic license. I wasn't really a Casanova, and yes, Lisa knows I wasn't really.

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 28th January 2007

lol.. the pattern's great. :grin

.... off to read number 7..

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 28th January 2007

i meant number 8.. sorry.. XD

Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 29th January 2007

Hee hee! Great last line.

Also liking the triangluar shape.

E

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 29th January 2007

Ooooerrrr, Phil -- a touch of masochism here?

Seriously, this is a funny one, and my favorite so far. I like the fact that you separated this last line from the rest of the text -- it catches us by surprise and is all the more amusing.

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