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Coffee, two sugars please
By Herbert
17 June 2005
This is me during the working day

Who would have thought
It is no more
Who would have thought
It is gone half past four

I dilly and dally
To the days end
But then I rally
Just one more will I send

I am frantic and rushed
One more must I do
I am pushed, I am pushed
So much to get through

I sit and fold
Till my fingers ache
One more I am told
I think I will break

The phone is ringing
Oh what now, I think
And more they are bringing
I think I will sink

I lick and stick
And fold them in two
I will be sick
If more I must do

Who would have thought
So hard I strive
Who would have thought
It is gone half past five

To and fro
Until I am dead
Time to go
Enough said

Reviews
consistent voice
Written by kevinrobson73 (371 comments posted) 19th June 2005
well constructed 
i didn't get the full sense of the tedium and the distaste, seemed like you were only mildly resigned to it 
(half five not excessivve-now 7 or 8-you might have a drama) 

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