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The Clock (700 words)
By kevinrobson73
19 June 2005

Went to a playwriting 2.5 hour course at Liverpool Everyman Theatre Sat 18th June. It was quite inspiring and this was a piece from choosing an object on a table and his instruction there. Everyone who wanted to got their chance to act their play out on stage to the other delegates

Thanks to Lawrence Wilson


Present day,in the front room of Kevin's house twin brother Lawrence, also aged 33 (by some co-incidence) has called unexpectedly and walked straight in despite Kevin smaller weaker trying to stop him)

 

Lawrence: (pointing to wall)This, this, all the time you had it, you told me you never told me you had it

Kevin: No I never

Lawrence: You've been keeping this from me, how long have you had it? 

Kevin:Since just after she died

Lawrence:I bet you didn't even wait for her to get cold

Kevin: She wanted me to have it 

Lawrence:Oh yeah, when did she tell you that?

Kevin: Just before she died

Lawrence:That's rather convenient, was anybody else there?

Kevin:Yes, Uncle Alby

Lawrence:Figures. He's dead too,I want it (reaching up to the wall and pushing on the securing bracket)

Kevin:Leave it 

Lawrence:Or what? What you gonna do about it? (turns to Kevin, pushes him in chest)

Kevin: (takes a step back, stuttering) y, you you leave it alone

Lawrence:You gonna stop me? (hands on hips belligerent, staring Kevin down)

Kevin: (meekly) Perhaps we can share it

Lawrence:Like what, half each, (shouting now) cut it down the middle (louder) are you crazy? 

Kevin:(not meeting Lawrence's bulging eye stare)No, what I meant was you have it weekends, I have it weekdays?

 

Lawrence:(still loud, laughs) Ha, like you do with your kids?

Kevin:(indignant) That's a cheap shot, you know Cathy wants full custody now. I'm not going to be able to even write to them if she gets her way 

Lawrence:Perhaps you should have thought about that before you took up with that trollop from the Co-Op

Kevin: (rising to full non impressive height) She's not a trollop

Lawrence:Whatever, ... you gonna give me this clock ?

Kevin: Mum wanted me to have it, you know why

Lawrence:Of course, you were the suck up

Kevin: You know that's not true, I tried harder, all you've ever known is how to break things, how to hurt

Lawrence:(gently) Would it help if I said I was sorry?

Kevin: It would be a start (he extends his hand to shake)

 

Reviews
Made me laugh
Written by Cherry26 (10 comments posted) 2nd August 2005
I think this scene was a good start for something. Some of your asides made me laugh out loud. For example "aged 33 (by some co-incidence)". The flow of the dialogue is pretty good. The ending kind of puttered off for me but I still liked it very much. Is it part of a larger thing yet?

Written by jean.day (2257 comments posted) 2nd December 2005
I've been reading through some of your work, and enjoying it very much. This one struck a chord with me as we have had similar discussions over inherited bits with others in our family. It tells a story in very few words, but it comes across well, and is fun to read.  
 
Thanks for your reviews of my work.

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