Of all these, this one means most, yet I'm least happy with it.
About fifteen years ago, my best friend persuaded me to prompt for a local operatic group. I wasn't keen but I did it. I'll be forever grateful to him.
Thanks to those who have followed these rather silly pieces. They've been fun to write, I hope they've been fun to read. If I've given the impression of being a bit of a stud, nothing could be further from the truth.
Orchestra pit, early nineties.
Last Love, Lisa. 42nd Street.
Standing on a giant silver dollar
She tapped and shuffled
Into my life.
We time step onwards
Towards the horizon.
Years on,
Echoes of tap shoes
On plywood currency
Still excite.
This is my last love.
This is me.
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Magic
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 31st January 2007 |
| You say you are least happy with this, me I think it is one of the best of the series |
Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 31st January 2007 |
| I like this a lot too. It may be that you just need to distance yourself from this one for a while, Phil. When you really care about something you often tend to work it and rework it -- sometimes you just need to put it away and come back to it later. But I really did find this one charming -- love the idea of dancing on plywood currency. |
Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 31st January 2007 |
i loved the last two lines best.  really sweet.  |
Written by Clifftown (620 comments posted) 1st February 2007 |
I really enjoyed this too, as I have all of these pieces. This one is really lovely, you can tell there's a bit more to it than some of the others.
Great stuff. |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 1st February 2007 |
I might be wrong but this came across as achingly sad- the one that got away and will always be that.The memories we create are the ones that catch us out. I'm paraphrasing but it seems relevant here
Nice piece
J [and i was just joking about the stud thing,guys like that would never write poetry] |
HI Phil
Written by jean.day (2283 comments posted) 1st February 2007 |
| I thought this was lovely. Your love for Lisa shines through the lines. |
Written by LynB (435 comments posted) 1st February 2007 |
Hi Phil. I loved this poem, just as I have all the others. This reminds me of a line from a song I once heard:
'you're not my first love, but you're my last'.
I must admit to feeling a little sentimental, as the kind of love you obviously share with Lisa has eluded me so far....
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The Good, The Bad and The Ugly...
Written by coosh (868 comments posted) 1st February 2007 |
| Waited until the end to review these - thought at one point I might have to cancel the Christmas holidays. I like the simplicity of the concept and the execution, from the translucent slug, via the sadists and the legendary legs - not up there with the phlegm, but a very enjoyable sequence - there's a nice kick to some of the endings, and I suspect it was an entertaining nostalgia trip for you. Only disappointment: that number five wasn't called Mambo - and number eleven seems to have gone AWOL - was that after I posted them all on Friends Reunited? |
Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 1st February 2007 |
Thanks for sticking with these and for all your comments. They've been a pleasure to write, I hope you shared at least a little of that.
Phil. |
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 2nd February 2007 |
Thought the second half of this very good. Couple of awkward things for me - I felt like 'we time step..' wasnt in the right place.
However, this was a very touching piece. I've enjoyed the journey. well worth sharing.
Elli |
Written by Kathy (220 comments posted) 11th March 2007 |
I have followed the whole 'series' of these and yes, it was a pleasure to read them and great fun. They will look good in your anthology!
Kathy |
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