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A Sunday Sonnet
By CliffBowes
01 February 2007
A view of the North of England inspired by an LS lowry print which hangs in our bathroom. Written in the English sonnet form

Coal smoke, drifting into surreal black clouds.
The Salvation Army hymns drift from the park.
A grimy church awaits its meagre crowds.
The rattle of bairns’ hoops and dogs that bark,
Echo on the rain damp cobbles of the street.
Where gossiping mams, arms akimbo, stand.
Old men walk with sticks, their comrades to meet
On street corners, to talk of wars, second-hand.
By the church, the young girls chatter and fuss.
Giggling, as the boys strut by, right on cue.
“Half-Past the Hour”, loud church bells inform us,
Time to look for a hard, un-cushioned pew.
Time to put Yorkshires and beef on the heat.
Time to escape from this Lowryesque street.

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It could be Ireland in my father's time
Written by Marybarry (237 comments posted) 1st February 2007
I was back in Ireland again on a sunday morning. 
 
50 years ago when I was a girl, it was exacyly as you describe Yorkshire!! 
 
Thank you for a lovely read. marybarry

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 1st February 2007
It might be like Ireland half a century ago, but it's not Yorkshire, nor was it meant to be. 
 
I liked this for its simple but evocative descriptions. Glad you didn't forget the 'rain damp' cobbles. I've lived in my corner of Lancashire for eighteen years now and I don't think I've seen a completely dry set yet. 
 
Phil.
Nit pickin!
Written by Marybarry (237 comments posted) 2nd February 2007
Oh Phil, 
The old school mam came out then!! 
 
Pity you cant use a red marker. 
 
Don't you ever have a slip of the typing finger?? 
marybarry
Thanks Folks
Written by CliffBowes (176 comments posted) 2nd February 2007
Thank you Phil and Mary for your comments. The reference to 'Yorkshires' in the penultimate line may have muddied the waters. It is of course set in Lowry's Manchester area of Lancashire.

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 2nd February 2007
Many a slip Mary. Many.

Written by Kathy (220 comments posted) 28th February 2007
A beautiful scene, beautifully told. 
Kathy

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