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Poetry
On a Restaurant
By no1butClo
01 February 2007
Inspired mainly by a book called Holy Fools [Joanne Harris - fantastic read], and the Italian restaurant in which I earn my meagre monies. Suggestions welcome

enjoy...

It is interesting to watch
the grease-paint melt,
slip down these faces and
slicken the floor in this
glorified playing house.

Oh, the costumes stay,
adhere even, to the clammy,
overfed skins in which
these players live

and feed. And that's
where I come in. ENTER:
STAGE RIGHT tray held high;
liquor, tinkling with ice and
just the right amount of
glitter for this cabaret.

And backstage, the techies
swear and sweat over dirty
flames, spitting fat and
the delicacy of haute cuisine;
high as the fires of hell.

Curtain call: at the evening's
end we leave the boards, the
Front of House and undress.
Dancers, actors, jesters all,
hang up the trappings that
make this circus tick

and return to the mud-spattered,
trodden-down dreams
of the lives we led before
the showman stole our souls.

Reviews

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 1st February 2007
I think this is a fine poem.  
 
When you are serving people, they tend to see you as a nonentity; you are very much just a functional thing there for their convenience. I really like the way you have cast yourself as an stage actor to distance yourself from the menial nature of your job -- it is the only way to get through all the drudgery, and I did this all the time too.  
 
Loved the reference to the kitchen as 'back stage' -- with the sweating and swearing cook-techies. 
 
And a busy restaurant is very much a circus -- all the personalities, the crazy things that happen. In my experience, most of the 'actors' certainly do have 'mud-spattered trodden-down dreams'

Written by Phil (6738 comments posted) 1st February 2007
Very different to much of what is posted on here. I liked this very much. Full of good ideas.  
 
Small suggestion if I may: drop the first four words and begin with ,'Watch.' For me it would have much more initial impact. 
 
Phil
The World is but a Stage.
Written by Marybarry (237 comments posted) 1st February 2007
Who are we to argue with that. 
Great description of your part(work)And the stage (life For you at that moment) 
 
You should continue with this idea and describe a few other situations in the same way. 
 
I found it very good. thank you.Marybarry

Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 1st February 2007
Sorry Chloe, one of your least moving poems for me. Just lacks that je ne sais quois that is in your other work. 
 
Too work-a-day - no Chloe magic, sorry! 
 
Oli :)

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 2nd February 2007
Liked the metaphor very much - really nice concept and a good twist so to speak. However, I'm with Oli a bit in that I liked it but it won;t stay with me the way some of your other pieces have. Can;t put my finger on why. 
 
Elli
Its marmite for me
Written by Pixy_bizz (3 comments posted) 5th February 2007
There were bit about it which i thought were really good, and it almost had a kind of T.S Eliiot feel to it, but then threr were other bits that just didnt move me quite as well, still i think its quite a good effort, especially as ure w*nkered half the time now coz ure so busy.  
Mr, G
OOH
Written by no1butClo (337 comments posted) 5th February 2007
you're gonna pay for this george. 
 
sorry everyone.

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