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Six days before Christmas: x (final)
Written by fellpony
04 February 2007
One of the farm poems; not sure if it will go into the saga, though chronologically this is where it belongs.

Almost all the people in here are dead and the farm does not raise, kill or sell turkeys any more. Living people's names have been changed.

The runnel that always spreads across the road
outside our gate is frozen now. I tread
carefully down the hill towards the farm.
Our in-lamb ewes raise their horned heads to look
as I pass by, then calmly feed again.
All’s quiet. The spruces by the riverside
stand black against the frost on field and fell.
The beck runs silent with an edge of ice.
A pair of ducks get up and prudently
fly off in a large circle, worriedly
conferring as they go. Wise: for death waits
along the lane.

Out of the turkey-shed comes Frank, who, old
and shrewd, has done the killing here each year;
he twinkles at me from beneath his hat.
“You got your pinny on, I see,” he says.
A captured bird twists upwards as it hangs
inverted from his knotty fist; it looks
snakelike, with a red, unseeing eye.
He holds its beak, and slices its white neck
until the blood in a bright shower falls
over his boots and scarlet-dappled straw.

Then suddenly the body jerks to life,
beating huge wings at terrifying speed
as though this creature that could never fly
would make a maiden flight to outpace death.
As it abates, Frank hands the storm to me:
“You tek this’un; see if they want some more.”
No time to shrink or wonder if I dare.

The women’s voices rise
above men’s in the byre. The heifers stand
neck-tethered in the warmth, and feathers fall
into white drifts across the muddy floor.
Shifting, the pluckers make a space for me;
Mrs Frank, wrapped in gloom as in her coat,
and blue-eyed Angela, her nose chilled pink;
my husband with his woollen hat aslant,
ripping quill feathers out at speed; and last
a woman whom I have not met, whose voice
drills through the down-filled air.
The children leap about us choosing quills
and offering to help, until a new
and better game appears, and then they’re gone.
Before long I have finished with my bird
and carry it indoors for Tom to clean.
Blooded, I wait for Frank to kill again.

Reviews

Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 4th February 2007
It's a great environment in which to face the realities of live, death and everything in between is the farm. Sounds like these birds were at least not "battery farmed", and they had the dignity of an individual slaughter, rather than being played football with. 
 
Anyhow, a lovely personal narrative, well written (of course) and evocative for me beyond the obvious farm realities. Excellent stuff. 
 
Oli :)

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 4th February 2007
This is my favourite of yours so far. I love the way this is told so matter of factly, at least on the surface. You paint a pretty idyllic scene only for it to be interupted by waiting death. 
 
Your descriptions are very visual, almost as if you want the reader to see, not think, at least at first. In this respect (And I am sorry to keep doing this to you-honestly!) Dylan Thomas sprang to mind.  
 
There's something very immediate about this that pulled me in from the start. I didn't really want it to finish - never said that about a poem before. 
 
This flows so well with an easy pulse. 
 
Afraid I can't offer any criticism. 
 
Fot me: excellent. Thanks. 
 
Phil. 
Always...
Written by patterjack (1196 comments posted) 4th February 2007
... this slaughter is a somewhat traumatic even if necessary -- it was a part of my early life also but on a much more minor scale . 
 
The idea behind the poem gets a little closer to Robert Frost than to Dylan Thomas -- but only in the most general sense  
 
I too think highly of it  
 
patterjack
two poets
Written by fellpony (1617 comments posted) 4th February 2007
whom I admire very much - Frost, if anything, even more than Thomas. I'm deeply complimented. Thank you - this is probably joining the saga now ... 
 

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 11th February 2007
I too like this very much. One thing, 
 
Should 'pair of duck' have an s on the end? 
 
Loved the contrast of the (mostly) tranquil and beautifully descriptive opening with the rawness and brutality of the kill and back to a matter of fact, more peaceful scene at the end.  
 
I thought this was great in terms of emotional impact, descriptive imagery and having a narrative element without feeling like it should be prose. Definitely one for the saga imo 
 
Elli

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