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Final Prophecy
By rilLie
05 February 2007
haven't written anything in a while..XD anyway.. yeah..XD Right now, we have like.. 6 homeworks to do... I have 2 plays to manage, and a few papers I need to write... Ugh..XD And right now it's 6:24 pm in my computer's watch..XD At this rate, I might not graduate..XD
Anyway.. the other day they gave out our cards, and it turns out I'm still in the Honor Roll. :) My grades are here
http://rillie.deviantart.com  in my current journal entry..XD anyway, yeah..
This is a synopsis of our Korean Horror play in our English classes integrated with our social studies topic for the quarter -- asian countries -- and I'm still thinking of revising it... Any suggestions, anyone?

When a girl discovers a mysterious letter in strange writing, mysterious and scary things start to happen. Upon research, she finds out that it is in traditional Korean writing.
The voices of what was supposedly lost returns, and what wants its revenge shall strike,” it says, and voices suddenly haunt her and her friends, never there when they turn their heads, but always there.
“…and the spirits that lift their heads from the ground, below the moon that demands its payment…” Without reason, lights just go off on her, and silent cries follow her.
“…When the lights of the sky are dimmed, the vengeful cries of the dead will call on to your blood, and it will take back what it lost through the ages…” it continues, speaking of a mysterious revenge just waiting for time to let it unfold.
And now she doesn’t know what to do.
Who, or what, had written this dangerous and frightening letter? Who was it aimed to? Who was going to die, and why?
“But when the lights in the sky are dimmed, all angels will cease to protect the living and the wrath trapped within the earth will find an opening, to torment the souls of time…” And all of a sudden, she meets a strange boy, a Korean transfer student, and she thinks he knows something about the letter… and while secret after secret is exposed, she realizes that one of the most special things she treasures would be lost…
“…however, at the moment of hopelessness, a guide will pass through the sky, and once it sheds light on a silver blade, all terror will end and the cries of revenge turned upon will be silenced.” And that light is the only thing left that she can depend on, even if it was just something stated in old parchment, old, old parchment…

a/n: attack as you please. :)


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Written by Snodlander (501 comments posted) 5th February 2007
No idea what XD is, but then, how many of today's generation would recognise 'Gravy, booby'. 
 
At first it read a little like The Ring (not that I've seen it). If this is the synopsis of a play, then I'm not sure how silent cries can follow her around a dark stage. 
 
Also, I'm not sure how she translated it without the Korean student, which you imply she met after the translation. I would suggest that he is introduced early on and translates the letter (poem?) for her. 
 
It sounds an intriguing story, though. Rather than a synopsis (this is what happens) it is more of a teaser, the sort of thing you find inside a dust jacket. We don't know what the secrets are, for example. I'd like to see the full story, as there isn't enough meat in this to form any sort of opinion.

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 5th February 2007
I agree with Snodlander: this is more of a 'blurb' than a 'synopsis.' Both of these are damned hard to write, so I sympathize. 
 
This also reminds me of 'The Ring' -- a movie my two kids find particularly compelling.  
 
We could judge this better, as S has pointed out, if we had the entire story to compare it with.

Written by Fledermaus (3238 comments posted) 5th February 2007
If this is a play, why don't you write it out completely and post in in the drama section? A Korean horror story... Perhaps you could look up some things about Korean myth and folklore and use them in your story? Most countries have their own scary demons and ghost-stories and I'm sure the Koreans must have them too.

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 6th February 2007
Snod -- she's really smart, so she researched and somehow understood it.. and XD is sort of like a smiley.. IM'ing has these effects on me.. :x anyway... yeah... and we haven't finished the actual script yet... one of my groupmates for this lost the only copy of four of scenes...sigh.. i'm rewriting it now. 
 
Witzl -- thanks. :) 
 
Fledermaus -- We've researched... And once we've finished it, I'll try post it. :) There are Korean folklore stuffs here, but I forgot to put some in.. :x  
 
thanks. :) I'm off to revise this.. :grin

Written by Marybarry (237 comments posted) 10th February 2007
Jasus de lot uf ja huv lost me. :zzz :zzz :zzz :zzz :zzz

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