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Non-Fiction
John
By Phil
05 February 2007
I was writing this for January's lazy writers homework (biography) but soon realised it was much too big and difficult to complete in time. Still not complete, this is perhaps part 1 of 3 or four. I suppose what I want to know is, would you read more?

There are many reasons why I have a love of books and writing, but if I really had to narrow it down to the most significant reason, I’d say it was all down to John Thompson. Forty odd years my senior, a stranger until I was seventeen, now dead and gone; I miss him.

It seems like a different time altogether now, a different world even; but not so long ago I was only seventeen. Saturday afternoons usually saw me and a few friends in The Coach and Horses, a pub not far from the market place. We chose the Coach and Horses not for its décor or atmosphere, but for the landlord’s willingness to serve us. To be fair, we were all on the cusp of legal drinking age, but all of us carried that aura of green youth and inexperience.

Jez, Ronnie and I were in an upstairs room playing pool. At two o’clock they both had to go and meet girl friends. Left on my own, I decided to go downstairs and sit in the tap room to finish my pint. The only seat left was at a small table where an old man was sitting. I wouldn’t say old now, but at the time sixty seemed ancient. He was dressed in shirt, tie and jacket, but they had all seen better days. Wild grey and thinning hair topped a large head with big hairy ears and nose. Although sat down, I could tell he was tall. I took a seat and we did that thing all men seem able to do: nod and grunt to acknowledge each other’s presence without having to speak. So, we sat drinking and smoking at the same table, but otherwise apart. After a while I became a little uncomfortable as he seemed to be staring at me.


Back in the present my eighteen year old son has very dubious dress sense. Long hair, black baggy jeans with zips and chains and things and scruffy t-shirts are all we ever see him in. I should be grateful he’s had nothing pierced – yet. My wife reminds me that we both wore unusual clothes in our youth, and she’s right. Back in the Coach and Horses, I was wearing a khaki flight jacket. It probably dated back to the 1950s. Painted, drawn and stitched all over it were the names of my favourite bands and bits of their lyrics, and if I’m honest, bands I didn’t like much but completed the image.

‘Just reading your coat,’ he said. ‘I can’t help it. If it’s there, I’ll read it.’

Funny I can remember his first words to me and not his last.

Well that was an ice breaker. We introduced ourselves and got talking, I think it was about Scotland. I’ve never been good at accents but even I could tell he was Scottish. My father was born in Glasgow and raised in Fife and most of my family are dotted around central Scotland. I suppose it gave us something to talk about. He came from Elgin, which is much further north, Scotland’s smallest city, not far from the Moray Firth coast – and then he asked me how old I was. Not wanting to seem like a fool, I told him I was nineteen. I left soon after that to collect my wages from a part time job I had.

I don’t want to come across as a goody two shoes, but I’ve always had a problem with lying. I don’t like doing it and I’m not good at it either. Well after collecting my wages I got to thinking about John and how I had lied to him. At the time I thought it was a strange thing to worry about. He was a stranger I may or may not bump into again, whichever, it didn’t matter – but it did.

I went back to the Coach and Horses with refreshed funds. As soon as I walked into the tap room I saw him. He was talking to another old guy. I bought two pints of bitter and went across, giving one to John and keeping the other. He seemed pleased to see me, and pleased with the pint too. The other guy soon lost interest and wandered off.

‘I lied, sorry. I’m seventeen,’ I told John as soon as we were alone.

Reviews

Written by Clifftown (642 comments posted) 5th February 2007
Well, I for one would certainly want to read more. This was an easy flowing and well told introduction to what seems like a really special friendship - John was obviously a real influence in your life and I'm interested to know more about him and how your friendship developed.

Written by deathstillness (13 comments posted) 5th February 2007
Yeah, same here I would love to read more about this relationship.

Written by Snodlander (507 comments posted) 5th February 2007
Yeah, what cliff said. 
 
Reminds me of a story about one of my brothers. I'll post it sometime when i get the chance

Written by Marybarry (237 comments posted) 5th February 2007
Well Phil you and Talisker are among the best on this site. YES I would love to read more about you and your long dead friend. But never forget what Connolly wrote< only post the works that are not your best. I have the feeling if you write honestly about your friendship it will be more than good, FIND A Publisher! 
Trinny

Written by Fledermaus (3492 comments posted) 5th February 2007
Good story, but how did this get you writing? I can guess about it: You and John became friends and shared a passion for books or something like that, but that's not in the story. 
Good annecdote though and I liked the description you gave of your son compared to yourself at that age too.

Written by teddy (240 comments posted) 5th February 2007
Some years ago I worked for a Scottish company and, while with them, I managed to make some very good friends amongst the Scots, one in particular with whom I’ve been in touch ever since. Your story reminded me a bit of him. Unlike John, he’s still very much alive though. 
 
really enjoyed this, looking forward to read the rest. 
 
teddy

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 5th February 2007
Thanks for the positive comments. Given me the confidence to write the rest. Probably post next part by the weekend. 
 
Phil

Written by anorwegianwood (278 comments posted) 5th February 2007
I'll be repetitive and say I would certainly like to read more!

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3570 comments posted) 5th February 2007
I. too, thought it was a great anecdote, well and honestly told but what an odd place to stop.You must have known we would want to know more. I'll just bet that pint eased the pain and betrayal of the lie. 
Actually I think that first paragraph was an object lesson in good introductions. I was hooked from then on 
Looking forward to the rest 

P.S I don't remember calling you a deluded yorkshireman. I'm sure I'd never accuse anyone of be a yorkshireman--oops
HI Phil
Written by jean.day (2369 comments posted) 6th February 2007
I too enjoyed this and await the next installment. You painted a very interesting picture of yourself at that age. I liked the idea that you chose to tell him you lied immediately you got to see him again.

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 6th February 2007
Writing this hurriedly before the computer decides to end it all -- who knows if I'll manage to get this review completed? 
 
This little snippet tells us more about you than it does about John, but it definitely whets our appetite for more. I love the fact that the lie you told did not sit well with you. I have an awful time lying myself -- hate doing it, hate getting caught -- but I was nowhere near so honest at the age of seventeen. I too look forward to more.
wait. I have a question
Written by milz (35 comments posted) 6th February 2007
i know i'm just a 12-year old girl. Such a young girl. What is the spelling of realize? why s?...please reply. THanks. THanks for all your comments I appreciate them very much. Youre such a great help.

Written by johniebg (553 comments posted) 7th February 2007
Good stuff, too short but well written. Created a good image in my mind of the people and places and the time. This is obviously a very personal piece of writing and this started to show towards the end in an emerging sentimentality (no idea weather thats spelt right) but would definately read more and like I said, probably in bigger chunks. 
 
Loved the transposing of you and your sons fashion sense and the sense of this guy sitting there. This reminded me of sitting in country pubs and being engaged by wily old locals.

Written by Kathy (220 comments posted) 11th March 2007
I also had a 'teacher' whom I miss very much. Her name was Dorothy and she taught me how to appreciate literature. When she spoke a poem or piece of prose, her eyes would close in deep thought and emmotion and she taught me how to speak them simply and from the heart. That is what your writing does Phil, there is no pretention, which is a great tribute to your dear friend. 
Kathy

Written by ellipinnock (1790 comments posted) 12th March 2007
I came back to read this as I saw you've posted part 3 and noticed that I was rude enough not to leave a comment last time. And now it serves me right because everybody else has said what I wanted to say. 
 
I do like your writing style - simple straightforward and, ultimately, engaging which is the whole point of the exercise. 
 
Elli

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