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Poetry
Warrior
By Fledermaus
06 February 2007
He rides his chariot
And casts his javelin
Woad covered, brightly dressed
Around his neck a torc
There he fights for his clan
His deeds are put to rhyme
By the bards

He drives an old hummer
And fires his uzzi
Tatooed, wearing nike air
Blingbling around his neck
There he fights for his gang
His deeds are put to rhyme
By the rappers

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Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 6th February 2007
One - a historical hero. 
 
The other - a complete (rhymes with cat) 
 
Interesting juxtaposition of similar actions leading to different reactions - at least from me. 
 
Phil.
warrior...:))
Written by milz (35 comments posted) 6th February 2007
when i hear the word warrior, i think of a hero. Good poem. The one you're mentioning in the poem is really a warrior. Such an imagery. I like it. :)

Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 7th February 2007
Thanks Milz and Phil. 
It's strange how many paralels there seem to be between the two. And if one'd would look at the ancient heroes from a modern point of view I think many of them would be labeled 'problem youths'...

Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 7th February 2007
Yes. Not quite sure if the comparison works for me. I feel sorry for the ancient pictish/celtic warrior being reduced to the level of a gangsta. 
 
When the Picts fought the Roman legions at Nechtansmere, it was more than a gangland feud. 
 
Interesting though, Batty. Thought provoking. 
 
Oli 
 
"The history book on the shelf, 
is always repeating itself, 
Waterloo!" - ABBA :)

Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 7th February 2007
Thanks Oli. 
Oh, they surely fought against foreign invaders too, but I think many of the wars between petty kingdoms and clans over cattle and land were close to being gang fights.
conquer and destroy
Written by bwoz (125 comments posted) 8th February 2007
The ancient warriors used violence to conquer, and conquer was necessary for survival back then -- to conquer was to grow and prosper. 
 
Today's "warriors" seem more bent on destruction for the sake of shock value. I read about a young punk who killed a lady so he could take the tires and wheels from her car. He torched the car out in the desert -- body inside, and the cops found him at his (parent's) house with the car wheels in his bedroom.  
 
Sorry for the mini rant -- good comparison and good length. It doesn't have room to be unreasonable, the images I mean. 
 
BW

Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 21st February 2007
Hi BW. 
You're right that the context is completely different, but the warriors of old weren't always fighting for a good reason either. In many sagas they kill just for the sake of killing itself...

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