Our garden is encrusted in frost and I am dreaming of springtime.
Himalayan Poppies
Torn from skies, those petals;
centers of scattered gold-on-onyx
When they fall, one by one,
we see
pieces of summer days
lying careless on the
warm brown earth.
Chrysanthemum
They came enclosed in cellophane
Each globe a thousand pointed ivory teeth
Each crushed green leaf so pungent-fresh
Sharp-scented, breathing spiced perfume
Into the hope-chilled autumn air.
Iris
This gaudy lady with her dress
a ragged purple velvet and
her clashing belt and purse of gold.
And yet, she stands so nonchalant
She nods and sways amidst the green
So calm and cool in summer's heat.
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Written by Fledermaus (3304 comments posted) 6th February 2007 |
Three nice poems. The way they flowed reminded me of haikus, perhaps because there is only one article in the whole piece. The first one is too clearly different from the other two, but they all make nice reads. |
Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 6th February 2007 |
The first is different in style and tone to the others, but no matter. I enjoyed all three but Poppies was my favourite. (Odd, as I don't like them in my garden - I adore iris.) Phil. |
Written by fellpony (1616 comments posted) 7th February 2007 |
Nice images, well crafted. I liked the idea of the three flowers being part of one set. From the title I wondered if your stay in Japan had given you an insight into their highly stylised flower arranging, as well as the concept behind haiku. Good light, unpretentious pieces which I enjoyed very much.
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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 7th February 2007 |
I felt I was looking at the flowers in close up through a telephoto lens, just me and the flower, no idea why; it was just the image came to me. Sjometimes you just take what you want even if it isn't what the writer intended cheers J |
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 7th February 2007 |
Back to your very best Mary. Gorgeous, gentle, evocative sketches. Being a gardener, I was pre-disposed to like these, but they are exquisite. Burns wrote of poppies: "Pleasures are like poppies spread, You seize the flower, its bloom is shed" Lovely. Put a smile in my soul. Oli |
Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 7th February 2007 |
Thank you, everyone. Trying to keep my hand in with this iffy computer. It has been behaving better today, but things are still touch and go. I may have to go out and buy more pens pretty soon. |
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 10th February 2007 |
Liked each of these pieces witzl. Simply beautiful. Elli |
I've just seen your poems Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 21st April 2007 |
| These are absolutely lovely Mary. I can only say that I reiterate everything that has already been said. Great! |
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