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Soul food
By Pixy_bizz
07 February 2007
I dont really know why ive written this, but have a read, i felt a bit weird today so forgive hte weirdness.

Caught somewhere between dreaming and fantasy,
Life genteelly passes by, like the gentle hum of a bee,
Bringing promises of the elusive taste of reality, lacing
this magenta garden with the arrogant, sickly sweet, smell of
the sap of time itself.

Light purple tendrils unfurl luxuriously,
writhing, suckling, upon Eros itself,
Thanatos quietly biding its time,
with luscious, eternal, patience.

Born with a curse, cast from Artemis,
we are born to playfully run,
and to lust for the hunt,
Crimson taints the cloud of the mind,
silver vapours fill the nostrils.

See the rain, it falls for us, clear and fresh,
cleansing, clean, cleaned, pure.
Gentle aquamarine, floods the spirit,
gushing, rolling in, crashing down,
Colour lives, Eternium.


Reviews

Written by Marybarry (237 comments posted) 7th February 2007
I dont care what the others say, YOu are MY poet. 
 
I adored it. Throw away the antibiotics and keep writing. 
marybarry 
If this be fever 
 
long shall it reign. 
No thanks
Written by fellpony (1608 comments posted) 7th February 2007
I'll stick to whisky. 
 
Whatever you are taking, please put the keyboard away until you've finished the course.  
 
You are well read and you have a wide vocabulary but this is too disjointed for me to make much sense of the content. 
 

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 7th February 2007
Not for me. I can't work out why you wrote it either. Less flowery stuff, more clarity please. 
 
Phil.
agree with Phil...
Written by no1butClo (337 comments posted) 7th February 2007
G, stop trying to lie, no matter how many greek words you use [Thanatos? Hades, surely, would be more fitting with Eros, who was, in fact, Egyptian originally anyway] no one will believe you are actually a scholar of the classics =P 
 
a good go though, i'll give you that. 
Your vocabulary is wide, but small. Extensive, sure, but not varied enough...magenta in two consecutive works? 
 
see you tomorrow 
 
clo x

Written by Pixy_bizz (3 comments posted) 8th February 2007
Yeah well at least i dnt have a fetish about italian waiters..... CLO!!!! :grin  
Besides if Eros is the Goddess of passion and life then Thanatos, the god of eath is more suiting than the caretaker of the Underworld, besides Hades is a kinda good guy, since he did help Zuese defeat hit titain father. 
So how knows about mythology now Biatch ;)

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