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Fat Baby
By Sir_Nigel
07 February 2007
This is something I wrote a few years ago when my lad was a baby. I just came across it again, tickled it up a bit, added a postscript and stuck it on here. That’s it. There’s not much to it but you might as well read it cos no-one else will.

 Although he gets a little crochety sometimes he’s generally a good little lad. I tell him so on a regular basis. Aw who’s a good little lad then? Who’s a good little diddy, fiddly, widdly little thing then. I ask him, tickling his belly. Then he’ll chuckle, say something like “Ng” and kick his chubby little legs vigorously in delight. Yes he is. I say and he chuckles some more. Other couples relate horror stories of sleepless nights, reluctant feeders, babies who can never be put down without squawking but he sleeps when he should, eats what he should and the rest of his day is spent gurgling in happy contentment. It shouldn’t be as easy as this but it is.
 

I often wonder what he’s thinking. What goes on in that big fat bald baby head? Oh look it’s that big chap again who pulls funny faces and tickles my belly hee hee hee ha ha ha Ng. Although babies probably don’t string sentences together like that – it’ll be something more basic: Ah big man come, tickle belly, make laugh. But then again I don’t suppose they talk like Chief Sitting Bull either. Either way – it’s doesn’t matter, he’s a big fat baby who likes to have his belly tickled. Yes he does. Who’s a little fiddly widdly diddly little thing then. He six now but catch him unawares and he can still be reduced to a helpless jelly in the same way. How long will that last? One day he’ll be a big lolloping lunk of a teenager.

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Written by Marybarry (237 comments posted) 7th February 2007
And believe me now and then he will still enjoy clowning around with dad. I enjoyed your writing but get the feeling it should be longer and tell the reader more. marybarry

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 7th February 2007
I can still tickle my 12-year-old and get a laugh or two. But I don't try to tickle the 15-year-old now -- more than my life's worth. I tickle the cat's tummy instead. 
 
My two said 'Ng' a lot too. Especially when they had their bellies tickled.
Sir Nigel's gone Ga Ga
Written by Thatllbemethen (83 comments posted) 7th February 2007
 
Nice short piece. Made me laugh, which is always good. 
 
Cheers

Written by anorwegianwood (278 comments posted) 7th February 2007
Some teenagers can still be reduced to jelly by tickling them. My parents used that technique to shut me up. 
 
Nice piece. I might suggest adding a bit more, but I like it for its shortness.

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 8th February 2007
Make the best of it Nige. They grow up quickly and those moments disappear. 
 
Phil.

Written by Sir_Nigel (40 comments posted) 9th February 2007
Thanks for your comments. Glad it struck a chord.

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