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By Witzl
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07 February 2007 |
OLD FASHIONED WAYS It’s there behind us all: the weight of flesh on flesh the human skin-to-skin and salt with salt; Two pulses juxtaposed to mingle Y with X. A crafty German thief with Irish maid; Dutch railroad man with prim and proper Dane Or sturdy Mohawk seed so loving-spent in English field. And whether wedlock-blessed or furtive quick behind-the-shed There was a time when each one born
required a meeting of the flesh. Now we have miracles: warm human child from frozen seed and frosty egg; With Petri dish and glass pipette cold embryo becomes a swelling bud of life. But flesh will still meet flesh and heart meet heart; Science's miracles
will not replace the art; When all is said and done old-fashioned is more fun. |
yay! Written by fellpony (1608 comments posted) 7th February 2007 | Reminds me of two friend of my husband, who were told they'd probably not have another child after their son was born; "Ee, but it was fun tryin'!" Bits here and there didn't quite do it for me: probably the listings of nationalities are very personal to you. Maybe they'll work better for me next time I read it. However, that's relatively minor. The metre of the middle section really raised the hairs on my neck in admiration: And whether wedlock-blessed or furtive quick behind-the-shed There was a time when each one born required a meeting of the flesh. Well done for avoiding the earlier obvious rhyme with X by the way.
| Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 7th February 2007 | Reading this it suddenly seemed funny that while people invented IVF, they also invented the contraceptive pill. So now humanity is able to have babies without having sex and of having sex without having babies... Interesting... | Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 7th February 2007 | Enjoyed this for its serious and fun side. Personally, I think this is oe of your best poems. Phil. | Written by Marybarry (237 comments posted) 8th February 2007 | Congratulations, Our awful society in one poem. I enjoyed reading it. maryb | Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 8th February 2007 | Nice, inventive and thoughtful ditty. Some say men are going to become totally redundant in the procreation department. I opted out anyway, so it doesn't bother me too much. Deep questions posed in a light-hearted way. How long until you can buy a "grow your own baby" kit from Argos? Oli | Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 8th February 2007 | Thank you, fellpony, Fledermaus, Phil, Marybarry and Oli. I was nervous about posting this; I'm not entirely finished with it, but I felt that I needed some feedback. You've all given me plenty. When I rewrite this, now I'll know where to start. | Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 9th February 2007 | Liked a lot of this witzl. I did think some of the lines could be doubled up, particularly those from, 'warm human child' down to 'glass pipette'. Liked the idea behind the last line but it read a little clumsily to me. Enjoyed it Elli |
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