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Poetry
10,000
By bloodywits
11 February 2007
First run-through, inspired by the title of Tool's 10,000 Days album. Haven't done any editing and decided to put it down for a few days to see what developed next. Would love to hear what you think, positive or negative.

--Bloodywits

I’ve run 10,000 miles in these shoes
Blind and deaf and dumb by the end
but still looking, listening, and calling for you
I’ve seen 10,000 people with these eyes
Hurt and cold, in love and on fire
But I haven’t seen you yet
I’ve breathed 10,000 times in this city
Felt it settle in my chest like lead
I’ve watched the sun rise and set,
Darkness slither in and fade out
Heard the birds sing and the children scream
Fanned the flames and burned it alive
Stole 10,000 raindrops and made a glacier
Shaped it like your face just to feel you
Slept 10,000 days away
so I could watch the stars spill over
Asked 10,000 questions hoping you’d be the answer
Dreamed of you and watched it fade
like mist burning off in the sun
Reached for you 10,000 times
only to grasp my own heart
with both hands

Reviews

Written by Marybarry (237 comments posted) 11th February 2007
Sorry Bloodywits, 
The 10,000dosent work for me. I feel the word ENDLESS might work better. 
matrybarry. :roll

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 11th February 2007
It's okay - but it's all been done before hasn't it. Bit of post-teenaged angst - well crafted but well worn. Sorry, 
 
Phil.

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