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Reunited: xviii
Written by fellpony
11 February 2007
probably the end of the sequence.

Apple mint taps at the window,
rosehips hang from the wall;
the trees are browning with autumn;
the leaves are waiting to fall.

I’m watching the seasons circle,
a spring of youth long ago;
thirty years’ summer a moment;
the frost will come, and the snow.

Your hair is fading, my darling.
My head is streaked too with grey.
I want to escape from the circle
of life that is running away.

We ought to catch at the moments
to pay for the desolate years,
to seize the bright sun, in avenging
the time that we wasted with tears.

But we have abandoned our anger
And love every moment we live.
We’ll never be free of the circle,
So laugh at me, kiss, and forgive.

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Written by Phil (6387 comments posted) 11th February 2007
It seems an appropriate place to end - although you may have more to say-after all, it's your story. 
 
As I read this through the first time it literally sent shivers down my spine, so top marks there. I am a hopeless romantic, but although this was full of romance, it was full of realism too. 
 
Also an effective end to the series. I was expecting you to return to the more figurative style (I think I likened it to Coleridge) of the first, but this suits the subject very well. The strong but gentle rhythm sits perfectly with the passing of time you describe and your mood as narrator of the piece. 
 
I've really enjoyed this series. (I think it's taught me a thing or two about poetry too, and how to respond to it - so thanks for that.) 
 
Loved this one. Wonderful. 
 
Phil.

Written by Marybarry (237 comments posted) 11th February 2007
Very beautiful. 
Thank you pat

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