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Lust calling
By no1butClo
12 February 2007
something a bit more...saucy...

I wasn't sure whether to involve another voice and make it a male/female thing, but I'm not sure quite how it works as it is, so feedback would be much appreciated

[this more to your liking, T?]

Body, flesh, stink
an exploding mass of impulses.

I am physical, hormonal, not
within my own control;

I am a list of concepts, no more coherence
will flow from these quivering lips.

So sate them with a higher flavour,
toxic enough to fool my instincts,

reverse my mind and drive me half
to heaven, half to hell with madness.

Taint my youthful goblet with the
lust of age, and knowing

one-seventh sin
six-sevenths sensation

crack the phial over my hot tongue
and let the liquid fever sweat from

naïve pores. Hit my belly with it;
make it broil, bring to the boil,

wait for an equal whose hunger
will consume my own,

whose wantings I may satisfy. And so
infuse us with passion for the

white knuckled, tight muscled
teen-troubled one night stand.

Reviews
Oh Yes!
Written by Talisker (1321 comments posted) 13th February 2007
I like, I like! (picture lascivious leer and gratuitous lip-licking!) Was this especially for little old me Chloe? 
 
Quite apart for the obvious eroticism (lubberly!) this is actually a very strong, evocative poem. Excellent! 
 
I like when things get to the visceral, rather than the effete, lame nonsense that we usually find here. This is about real animal feelings and emotions, untrammelled by pointless reasoning! 
 
More, I say! More! Encore Encore, la meme chose! 
 
Oli :)

Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 13th February 2007
Enjoyed this Chloe. I thought it ended especially strongly, both in form and words. 
 
Good stuff. 
 
Phil.

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