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Death of a great Aussie idler
By idlemusings
21 June 2005
A second posting of the first poem I ever wrote. It was for a mate who had to give up his easy live once he had kids.

ODE (OLD?) TO STEVE

 

 

There was a young man named Steve

 

For whom life was a tropical breeze

 

He lay in his house

 

And smoked on his couch

 

While watching the sports at his ease

 

 

 

One day his wife said ‘Oh Hon'

 

‘In me you have placed a wee bun'

 

‘Your idling days are over'

 

‘Me and child you must keep in clover'

 

‘No more playing for you in the sun'

 

 

 

Steve was distraught

 

What fresh hell had he wrought

 

His friends were aware

 

That with his penis down there

 

It was in trouble that he would be caught

 

 

 

The trouble was not the wife

 

But his laid-back and relaxing life

 

The call to work came today

 

And poor Steve must obey

 

To avoid dilemma, discord and strife

 

 

 

Many jobs they were tried

 

Fish processed skin and hide

 

But wee Cassie she grew

 

And more money was due

 

‘A real job now Steve' he sighed

 

 

 

Into new clothes he was bent

 

And to the office he went

 

A bum he had been

 

Now civil servant extreme

 

A genuine government gent

 

 

 

A quickie that day

 

Now fatherhood there to stay

 

No more fun days at the beach

 

And the remote control out of reach

 

Never again on the couch him to lay

 

 

 

The sports go unwatched

 

The bedposts un-notched

 

An eight-hour workday

 

And no time to play

 

A sad end for a life so debauched

 

 

 

So tell not tales of woe

 

Of suffering so long ago

 

They know not of torment

 

Who have not heard the lament

 

Of Steve, who lives down-below

 

Reviews
very good
Written by kevinrobson73 (371 comments posted) 21st June 2005
modern day "up the junction" 
 
some of the language was a bit archaic and stilted 
 
form and structure very good though 
 
think it has to be read slowly to be appreciated and savoured 
 

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