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The Road You Make
By bwoz
17 February 2007
“In life,” he said in punchy words,
“You make your own road.”

To that podium his road had run full of ruts,
littered with drunken fights, empty promises,
cheated victories for his embittered family
Now all standing to crutch his wounded dignity
to honor and remember his deedless life
and his profound courage to live it.

The gray lady before me, her road well traveled
through then and now, the lean times of “just make it work”
to far lands of lesser culture, Quonset huts and quinine
sometimes passing through the Burroughs,
Old Bean Town and the quiet autumn towns
where once we all lived and died dreaming.
Then four lanes – now just a golf cart path

The young man seated in the center of my eyes,
his road speeds along ardent lanes
of inspiration so all he need do is
keep between the lines, only stop to fill up,
and don’t exit too soon. Start early and quit before dark
to find a nice motel with a pool and cable TV
where all his friends are waiting to rejoice

And a woman called desire, her red dress 
a sleek convertible, she moves along her road
at a comfortable speed so we all can gaze at her
perfect approach, waving from the passenger seat
with a silver-toothed man to drive and help her smile.
He is her sister’s husband’s brother I am told, and much older.
His road too I would think.

And my road, it wanders through busy streets
traffic lights and exhaust fumes, then out to the old highway
where I can breathe easier and speed if I want,
to the crumbling asphalt of abandoned years where I slow down 
to preserve tread, straight ahead to find my rutted dirt road;
my podium at the edge of where the horizon looms
and I’ll have to walk from here.

Reviews

Written by Marybarry (237 comments posted) 17th February 2007
Morning Bwoz, 
Your is very good. I have read it a few times. 
Each time I find something different to think about. 
I have printed it so that I can read it at will. 
Get back to a second review tomorrow :)  
MB.

Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 17th February 2007
Some nice touches, best I've read today, but the rest were mince. 
 
I would say its far too long. You could say the same things in 1/4 of the words. 
 
Oli

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 17th February 2007
Really enjoyed the first and last verse. While there's nothing wrong as such with the middle section, there's far too much of it. Really interesting idea. As Oli says, too long. If you go in for rewrites, I'd be interested in seeing this again. 
 
Phil.

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