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Some People
By rilLie
17 February 2007
I've got this classmate who never cared about anything except her hair, and her prissy friends.. Her name is Meghan. I call her 'Bruha' which is Tagalog for 'harlot' .. i think.XD anyway, our class adviser, Ms. Dolly was already in tears when she was reprimanding her in front of the whole class, and 'Bruha' was just sitting there, laughing and smiling stupidly like Ms. Dolly wasn't even there. I love ms. Dolly, so much. She worked too hard for all of us to do well in school. And she's just, there. I had to write something..
To Meghan, hope you read this. :D

Some people aren't worth keeping,
nothing more than meets the eye.
There's nothing under that stupid smile,
with no emotions; they don't cry.

Yes, I know we all have flaws,
I myself have some.
But you never had a quality
to redeem you all along.

You haven't even done good things,
your heart is made of stone.
Don't care when your mother cries,
in the end, you're all alone.

Now I don't even give a damn,
whether you live or not.
Satan can throw you into his pit,
and leave you with his lot.

I watch your mother crying
I can't take it anymore.
She ain't my own, but my heart just hurts,
to see her tears once more.

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Therapy
Written by bwoz (125 comments posted) 16th February 2007
In all honesty, nobody will ever care about this poem, except you and maybe Meghan if she reads it. It is very therpudic for you, I can imagine. A lot of anger, aingst, some self pitty even though you direct the pitty toward another. 
 
I don't criticise you for writing this, we have all written similar poems -- all poets start out writing therpy pieces I think. 
 
I don't think I would post it here, but thats your decision. If you want Meghan to read it I would type it up, put it in an envelope and hand it to her personally. Talk about therapy, you'll feel like either the weight of the world has been lifted, or you'll feel like a total ignoramous (one of mom's favorite descriptives).  
 
Either way, you'll get more from this effort than posting it hear for me to criticize. 
 
Its not a bad poem, tho, as far as aingst and therapy go. 
 
BW

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 16th February 2007
thanks... I'm planning to give it to her... On Monday, maybe. :grin  
 
thanks again, 
rilLie
oh...
Written by -jellyacey- (22 comments posted) 17th February 2007
hheeeyyy..i never thought you felt that way about megan...haha...she's not the only one in our class who is well...a "bruha.." right rillie? it's really good and i think it suits megan....but..it's scary [to be blunt] sorry...but scary isn't bad for every one i guess:D go rillie..you're really good:D

Written by Fledermaus (3321 comments posted) 17th February 2007
I doubt if she would care if she is as you describe her. This isn't the first one about a classmate you have posted. It seems some of your annoyances are very inspiring :P

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 17th February 2007
jelly -- thanks. :) 
 
maus -- thanks. they are inspiring. I was writing this while my teacher was almost crying in front of the class.. which would by why I hate her so much. :)
Some people
Written by Josie (2796 comments posted) 17th February 2007
are made to hurt others. It is only when she grows up and someone hurts her badly that she will know how it will feel. Hello riLie - I've been away. Haven't heard from you for ages.

Written by Phil (6738 comments posted) 17th February 2007
Not up to your usual standards rilLie. Perhaps you were too cross? 
 
Phil.

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 17th February 2007
josie -- i've been away, too. And i missed you. :grin  
 
phil -- you bet i wascross. :grin i was all like: :upset yeah.. XD thanks, though. :)

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