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Mesopotamia

By Fledermaus

17 February 2007

A mighty nation
Powerful and strong
We had great armies
And knew they were wrong

We lived forever
Crushed other kingdoms
And we would never
Never ever fall

Our city is gone
Tanks roll though its streets
They do as we've done
A long time ago

Sumer, Akkad, Assyria, Babylon, Media, Persia, Macedonia, Seleucia, Parthia, Rome, the Sassanids, Arabia, Mongolia, Turkey, England, America... And other empires still to come...

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Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 17th February 2007

this is sad. and true. :grin

great work.
rai.

And so it continues - - - -
Written by Josie (2825 comments posted) 17th February 2007

From the "cradle of civilization" - so much warring and unhappiness. What has mankind ever learned? A well thought out poem Fledermaus but there's no answer to their problems.

Written by Phil (6845 comments posted) 17th February 2007

Strong stuff Fledermaus. Effective too. Not sure you need the addendum, all is clear without it. The contrast and similarities work well.

A pedantic point: in the first verse, 'they' refers to your armies (and them being wrong) I'm not sure that's what you mean at that stage of the poem.

Phil.

Written by Fledermaus (3448 comments posted) 17th February 2007

Thanks RilLie, Josie and Phil.
It's strange. Civilization is suposed to have begun there indeed, but I doubt if there are many regions with such a bloody past. Nearly every empire between the Atlantic and the Gobi desert has invaded it at least once.

Phil: I noticed that too. But I don't mind that it's ambiguous. Indeed I intended the stress on 'they', but the other reading is OK too.

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