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By -jellyacey-
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17 February 2007 |
uhm..so this is my second entry...I would like to thank all of you for those nice reviews:Dhaha...annyway...so this is one of my cheesy love poems [i know i have issues sorry...]so this was inspired by one anime i love... "ouran high school host club" for those of you who know it...this "could" be what Tamaki says..or thinks about...when he leaves for france in the last episode...I wanted to write this in fan fic. but I couldn't register so yeah.. please leave honest reviews:D thank you ]here goes nothing] You know in the end I find myself falling for you
After trying to convince myself that to me you were nothing more than someone I know
it got to the point that..
I couldn't stop thinking about you
that in my freams you were all I could see
that whenever you look at me I just stand still at the sight of you
And that whenever you smile at me I turn so red...
...I could pass as a tomato:D |
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Written by fellpony (1616 comments posted) 17th February 2007 | This is NOT POETRY. Please do your readers the courtesy of proofreading: dreams has a lazy typo in your piece, "freams". Unless you just intented a new word, in which case, you shouls explain or at least hint at what it means!!
Be funny, be original, apply some skill - can you see where I am going with this review? | ps
Written by fellpony (1616 comments posted) 17th February 2007 | You'll note I just invented 2 new words there ... intented and shouls.  |
Written by Marybarry (237 comments posted) 17th February 2007 | Hi Jelly.
Sorry, but it is not good. EDIT, REDUCE,
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