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By -jellyacey-
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17 February 2007 |
um..so I got one review and had to change it..sorry for the typo You know in the end I find myself falling for you
After trying to convince myself that to me you were nothing more than someone I know
it got to the point that..
I couldn't stop thinking about you
that in my dreams you were all I could see
that whenever you look at me I just stand still at the sight of you
And that whenever you smile at me I turn so red...
...I could pass as a tomato:D |
Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 17th February 2007 | Errors gone, but this still isn't poetry - sorry.
I feel guilty saying this, as I admire your use of English, (which I assume is not your first language) but you need to think what poetry is. There's no definitive answer to this, but it certainly isn't just prose split into lines.
Phil.
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