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Poetry
confusion
By darkrose12
17 February 2007
i just made this with all the emotion i have for he one that i can't love... it's free verse

here i am beside you
why can't i say the truth
that though i love u so dear
i have to hide because of fear

when will the day come
that i could say you're the one
who keeps all my worries and troubles away
who will never leave me no matter

all of thse i really desire
but because of the world
am all alone inside
wanting u to be by my side

when will the day come that you'll love me
for everything that i am and not to be
but whatever happens i know you'll be there
to care and comfort me but as a friend

i know you'll never see me the way i do
i just hope that you won't leave me here
go our seperate ways 
and never com back

i hope that you'll see 
that my love is so real
you're the only one i'll ever love
i just hope that you won't pretend

 

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Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 17th February 2007
You're very young and English isn't your first language. With that in mind, this is okay. In any other circumstances, it wouldn't be. Sorry. 
 
Phil.
Spell check necessary
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 18th February 2007
Do you have a spell checker on your computer? Please use it. Then why are you writing the word "you" as "u". I don't think this has anything to do with being a foreigner. I write in a foreign language, but I don't write "L" for Lei. I think that really you need to learn more about writing poetry and try again - preferably with a new subject. By the way, in English, we write I with a capital I, but, strangely, we write me with a small m. It's a strange language to learn isn't it?
sorry
Written by darkrose12 (5 comments posted) 18th February 2007
yeah sorry about that its just that i was really sleepy when i typed this into the computer the computer was not working properly... sorry for that

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