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Down and Out !
By CliffBowes
18 February 2007
All this serious stuff about death etc. is a bit heavy for New Years Day, so here is a bit of rubbish to raise a smile maybe.
"Kung hei fat choi"
新年好

 

I met her at the Old Swan Inn;
I’d been in there since seven.
Many drinks slipped down my throat
Before they closed at eleven.

She led me to her nearby flat
With promises of pleasure.
When we were bare I kissed her lips.
And called her ”My Wee Treasure”.

We lay on the bed: she raised her hips.
With lust our passions were fed.
But brewer’s droop had took its toll
And the important bits were d
                                           e
                                            a
                                             d.

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Written by Marybarry (237 comments posted) 18th February 2007
Loved it, Cliff. 
 
Tell your lady friend to wait for the resurrection. 
 
Marybarry :grin

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 18th February 2007
Yep, provided a chuckle. I like the way you droop the last word. 
 
Phil.

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 20th February 2007
Gung hei fat choi to you, too, here's hope that the firecrackers go off next time. Thank you for the laugh.

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 20th February 2007
Eek -- I meant to say 'here's hoping.' Does anything look stupider than one's own grammatical infelicities, preserved in writing for all to see?

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