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still getting to grips with this poetry lark, so any advice or suggestions will be greatfully accepted.

I cannot write
This late at night,
My brain feels slow,
The words won't flow.
I think I'll have a cup of tea,
And then a cigarette or three.

This empty page, once my good friend
Is taunting me, I need revenge.
Now I know I've lost the plot,
If these are the only words I've got
On this this here page in front of me,
Perhaps another cup of tea.

I rack my brain for words profound,
But sadly still none to be found,
Metaphor and imagery
Just simply will not come to me.

Another cigarette perhaps,
Maybe this is just a lapse,
I only kid myself, I know,
Its off to bed that I should go.

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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3569 comments posted) 19th February 2007

Right,so a poem about not writing poems. Perhaps I shouldn't write a review about it. Well as non-poems go it's quite amusing. and I supposes we have all been there [chocolates instead of ciggies for me] and can sympathise.
Nice one
J

Self reference
Written by Fledermaus (3492 comments posted) 19th February 2007

It's not something new, but it's still nice. I'm guessing you wanted to post something, but oouldn't come up with something, and at 4.23 am you were still puzzled, so you decided to write this down? I think you succeeded... You posted a poem

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Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 19th February 2007

"Insomnia" - written by myself

http://www.greatwriting.co.uk/content/view/4976/78/

Then, if you go to my website: http://www.whiteheadm.co.uk/html/josies_poetry.htm
there's plenty more to keep you going until daybreak, ha ha. - or until inspiration strikes.

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 19th February 2007

Writing about writing has never been a favourite of mine - last resort of the desperate. (I've been tempted many a time.) Having said that, not a bad attempt - at least it has the benefit of not taking itself too seriously.

Phil.

Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 19th February 2007

There's no real spark here for me, & if you ain't got it, you ainty ain't gonna get it.

Sorry to be so brutal. Perhaps try another form of writing.

Oli

Written by vdubber (5 comments posted) 20th February 2007

thanks for your kind comments, perhaps kinder than this poem diserves, as in hindsight perhaps I was just a bit too eager just to post something. In reply to your post Oli, 'no spark' is fair enough comment, however,

'if you ain't got it, you ainty ain't gonna get it. Perhaps try another form of writing'null

is perhaps a little harsh. I thought this site was for all levels of ability, where those of us yet to hone our writing skills, can improve by learning from those who have. If I were a more sensitive soul, I might be discouraged and not want to try and improve on my poetry. Nevertheless, I have a thick skin and will carry on.

Sorry to winge, but of all the great writers who use this site, I expected something a bit more constructive from your good self.

Very balanced response
Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 20th February 2007

Vdubber, I did try to couch my comment with a built in apology, even a heartless misanthrope like me does not wish to offend needlessly.

However, I had a longing to play football for Celtic, but I didn't have the requisite talent. I honestly feel that you cannot "teach" poetry. Its either in there or its not. You can hone it if its there, but there needs to be the right sensibilities to start with.

Its called "aptitude" I believe. My purpose was to get you to direct your precious energies in a direction where they might be more fruitful, prose perhaps? not to getyou to stop writing or posting.

If this all sounds arogant, please know that I'm very unsure whether I have any aptitude for poetry either. From comments though, I've been encouraged to struggle on - rightly or wrongly. I hope you can ignore my advice and do the same if you feel that way. I shall certainly review any effort you post - you may note that I put in a fair bit of effort in this respect.

Best regards
Oli

Written by andybyers (181 comments posted) 24th September 2007

Drink another cup of tea,
and up all night to pee you'll be.

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