WHY I WRITE?
Bottled up emotions Always needs a vent When I pour my emotions into words I rediscover solace You may like it Or else you may hate it Your liking or hatred Does it solve my emotions? No! But my words do comfort me I write to unwind myself I really don’t wish You to hate or like my writings But then each one has a readymade opinion. Your opinion and my life Are two different worlds altogether Your hate or care about my life May never change my words My life and words are my truest emotions Just like your opinion is only yours What surprises me the most is, Why? Why we love to pull others down? Find solace by unwinding yourself Rather than pulling others down You will find true peace With no malice towards others The mantra to life Make peace with your heart The world will see oh so beautiful! For me, the world is a beautiful place And I have made peace with my heart By words that flow from my heart And shape them into poetry.
Johnny D 18th February 2007 0030 hours
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Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 19th February 2007 | I assume this is in response to my reply to your PM - or would that be giving myself far too much credit?
I have no ready made opinion Johnny, I read each piece and make my mind up. I have no wish to pull anybody down. I don't comment on the person, I comment on the writing. If you don't want anyone to 'hate or like' your writing, why do you post?
An honest review:
My view is that again, your work lacks depth. This didactic style of browbeating dressed up in supposedly fancy words does not add up to poetry. I could take issue with just about everything you say, but I won't - just comment, that as usual, there is no balance. As poetry, this is very poor. There is no pulse or layers of meaning - just a thinly disguised lecture on a world view. Sincerely, it wouldn't even make it as good prose.
Note my comments are directed at your work, not you.
If you'd like no further reviews from me, let me know.
Phil. | Agreed
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 19th February 2007 | | Bottled up emotions do need a vent. My mother used to infuriate me so much that I immediately put pen to paper, but I never posted the letters. I would keep them for three days and then bin them. Try this - but others may have other ideas. I have an idea that a lot of bottled up emotions come out on the GW website. It is a therapy website for sure, but sometimes too much of it can be depressing for others who come here to read. I like reading light poems and funny poems, and especially when I am down. I expect everyone else has other ideas. I can only add this: I have done my best writing when psychologically I have hit rock bottom and it has not been miserable writing. I wrote "Ode to the Bluebells" in ten minutes flat when I literally had hit rock bottom in my life. Try writing lighter. | My 2p worth
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 19th February 2007 | My personal belief is that if you write for yourself then it should be kept for yourself. If you write for others it should entertain and engage the readers. This can take many different forms but the "bottom line" is the response of the reader "The meaning of every written communciation is the response you get"
Both are equally valid forms of writing but it is important to recognise the difference. IMHO
cheers
J | P,S
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 19th February 2007 | sorry I forgot to add that I'm not really interested in why people write but I am interested in what people write. That is why I'm here. [wherever that is]
J |
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 19th February 2007 | Nobody loves me,
everybody hates me,
think I'll go and eat worms...
What a load of old bollocks - THIS IS A POETRY REVEWING WEB SITE!
"Readymade" opinion, what like "readymade meals" or something, believe me, my opinions are home-baked, and I know Phil well enough to say the same for him.
This is a pathetic, self-piteous tirade! Are we supposed to lie and say we like your poetry? As far as personal opinions are concerned, I don't know you, except from the emotions you display in your "poems", your "website" and your comments (I note that you rarely, if ever, take the trouble to review others' work), UNLIKE PHIL & I. From this evidence alone, I can say that I have little in common with you, but "hate" is a very, very strong word in English. I would not bandy it about as you do.
It is a sad state of affairs when genuine, decent, generous, magnanimous contributors like Phil get lambasted like this. Hang your head in shame!
Oli  |
Written by fellpony (1617 comments posted) 19th February 2007 | BBS said it - this is for the person writing, not the reader. I have sometimes felt like this - who hasn't? but i don't enjoy re-reading work I wrote in this mode; nor, I'm afraid, did I much enjoy reading yours: too obvious, too self-justifying to engage my mind.
Come down off your branch and write about things down here on earth.  It'll be good practice.
| Dear Me.
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 19th February 2007 | At risk of bringing the Temple of Dagon once again upon my head, I must be honest Johnnie and reiterate that since you never seem to extend the courtesy of reviewing the work of others, you can hardly complain when those who take the trouble to favour you with an opinion are less than complimentary of your motives. I think the technical term is Hypocrite. But of course, you may say that. I could not possibly comment.
Slan!
PS. I am aware English is not your first language, or as far as I can deceipher from the hotentot humbug you post , even in your top ten. My advice, along with a phone call to the Samaritans, is to flog one of your excellent cardigans and purchase a copy of Brewer's Dictionary of Phrase and Fable. Braille Edition.[ Capitals only ] I think
you will find it most helpful. |
Written by Kathy (220 comments posted) 22nd February 2007 | Hello Johnny D
I can't say that I understand your life or you at all as I have never met and do not know you. I can see how much effort and feeling you put into this poem... it reveals a great deal about you and what comes across very clearly is a large amount of anger. It is directed at the reader because you are very defensive about what he or she will think of your writing, which means so much to you. That is probably why people have reacted to in quite a defensive way but some of the advice given I think is very good.
For the time being, perhaps trying not to write when you are angry would be a good idea? Yes, I think that having a go at funny verses might cheer you and your readers up!
Yours with respect,
Kathy |
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