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Dream me a Dream
By dirtyhalo
19 February 2007
 Hi there, another newbe here. You lot are probably sick of people like me crashing your site, hee hee.

Hope you all enjoy a wee taster of the sort of stuff i write xxxx

  Dream me a Dream

  Dream me a dream
  a day without worry.
  Dream me a dream
  a purse full of money.

  Light me the way
  And shine upon hope
  Light me the way
  So I may cope

  Sing me a lullaby
  So I may peacefully sleep
  Sing me a lullaby
  My stresses you keep

  Dream me a dream
  A purse full of money
  Dream me a dream
  a day without worry.

Reviews

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 19th February 2007
Sounds like a secular bedtime prayer. If that's what you were going for - great. 
 
Phil.

Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 19th February 2007
What d'you mean "people like you"? If you are serious about poetry, then you are welcome. 
 
As for this effort, its OK if you are under ten years old, or as phil says, as a childish, non-religious, bedtime mantra. Artistic merit? Null point. 
 
Oli
A sense of humour!
Written by Kathy (220 comments posted) 19th February 2007
I think that the poem deals with the serious side of life, but you use humour and escape into childhood skipping rhymes almost, in order to keep the 'hope' as you mention in your poem. Almost like crossing your fingers, to hope for a good outcome, like kids do... I don't know whether I agree that you have scored Null point as another reviewer says, I think that you should go on with your efforts!
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Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 20th February 2007
I think I am one of the few on this website who actually likes simple poems, clearly put. Please keep doing these simple rhyming poems - just to keep me company. Why not write some simple poems for children so that they can follow them - or I will: Dream me a dream where the . . . . etc. I think that by starting a poem in a simple way, you can open a huge door. I have been trying to do this with "colour poems". Se my "Colour Me Red." It starts off in the same simple way, but colours, like dreams, can open a big door to subject matter. I did a poem about "dreamland" for children. It also opened the door to an enchanted world. Good - do keep up this good work. Try a "Colour Me" poem. PS We're all glad that you crashed our website as long as you think about your spelling and punctuation, ha ha.
PS
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 20th February 2007
The spelling of the word "see" as "se" - - not a spelling mistake, just quick typing, ha ha. (No excuse for not checking it though).

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