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Poetry
Brain Sauce
By Flippy_D
24 June 2005
Brain Sauce is a fairly temporary and rubbish title. Enjoy.

I once observed a sullen philosopher,
Sitting in the back of an unfamiliar café.
His hands twisted and wrested
The fumes from his stirring brain.
And he ate alone, always ate alone,
Ate and drank utterly alone.
In this weird café
Where people's faces are shadowy, and there is just the
Drun-drun-drun drone of electric fans.
Approaching him, I saw he wore
A battered hat with which he masked his head
From the cigarettes and rain of silhouettes.
His suit was blue; it matched his mood,
He shook his head at me without looking and muttered:
"It has been done before,
It has all been said and done before."
I left by the back door.

And up against a pillar, a woman trying to be a girl,
Trapped by scrunched newspaper and examining her
Nicotine-coloured nails.
She was alone, the gas-lamps her lovers,
And the desolate street her confidant.
I noted the pigeons,
And the hole in her tights.
The paving slabs seemed to rise up around her - I asked
For some courage.
Approaching her in the night, I saw she wore
A raincoat to shield her from the leers of passers-by.
It was black, to match this night.
She breathed mist into the darkness and smiled
With nothing-eyes:
"Got the time Sir? I'm asking you
Have you got the time?"
I left her far behind.

Reviews
excellent
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 24th June 2005
I think tis ia an excellent write
yes
Written by darrenmc (54 comments posted) 24th June 2005
yeah, this is fantastic, i love the atmosphere in the cafe and outside in the city, it really comes across, the personalities of the characters, i read it about 10 times before writing this, i dont normally do "reviews" cos im not a writer but this is the dark noir stuff i love so had to, gonna check rest of your stuff now...
Excellent
Written by LaughterLines (34 comments posted) 26th June 2005
I thought your poem was excellent. The great choice of words you used were fab and it was so descriptive. A gripping piece of poetry and a pleasure to read. Thanks for sharing. 
 
LL :)

Written by Cherry26 (10 comments posted) 28th June 2005
This is good. The methodical pace appeals to me. I like the occasional repeatition and the forcus on sound.  
wow
Written by alandavidpritchard (59 comments posted) 30th June 2005
a deeply, deeply impressive poem - quite extraordinary
gorgeous
Written by no1butClo (337 comments posted) 27th November 2006
...perhaps, flippy_D, it may be beneficial to read back your own work, and work out what it is you think you've lost. This is almost you at your best. I wonder which philosopher it was... 
 
clo x
ps
Written by no1butClo (337 comments posted) 27th November 2006
change the title

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 27th November 2006
Yep, I think this is brilliant too. I was sold when I got to the drun- drun-drun of electric fans, then it just kept getting better and better.  
 
For no particular reason, this reminds me of E.S.V. Millay's 'Sad Young Men.' Not the content, but the mood. 
 
'Lost Time' ?'Got the Time?' 'Midnight, Moonlight and Pigeons' ? I agree with no1buClo -- anything but Brain Sauce.

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