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Dream me a dream - reprise |
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By Phil
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20 February 2007 |
Talk of dreams got me thinking and this was the result. It rhymes and has rhythm, but is it poetry?
Strong language. Dream me a dream
The landscape of nightmare haunts this mind
Turn on the TV and see what I find:
Raped, murdered infant,
Two years and gone.
Chavs on the loose
Destroying for fun.
Suicide bombers
Killing their own.
Starving people
All skin and bone.
The rich fuck the poor
It’s all just a game
While we dream dreams of wonder
And things stay the same.
So dream me a dream
Of pink fluffy clouds,
Where I bury my conscience
(If scruples allow.)
Please,
Dream me a dream
Where I can hide away
From this nightmare world. What can I do anyway?
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Dream me a dream - reprise
Written by CliffBowes (176 comments posted) 20th February 2007 | | In answer to your question in your intro. Yes Phil, I think this is poetry, it scans well and is also a succinct comment on the way a lot of us turn a blind eye to the horrible side of human nature and look for solace in other things hoping the nastiness will go away if we ignore it. The little girl, raped and murdered by her uncle, allegedly, is one of the worst cases I have come across since the Moors case and I have worked in prisons for thirty years since 1963. |
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 20th February 2007 | Powerful stuff - a good antidote to the "soft and fluffy" dream poems.
Unfortunately, dwelling on this stuff (reality) tends to drag the mood down - so I'm away to read some Josie!
Oli  | Ha Ha
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 20th February 2007 | | I did say that my "dream" poem followed on from dirtyhalo's poem, and I did say that such a place was not in this world. I am only too well aware of it Phil. The reality of the world we are living in seems to be getting worse and worse, and I often wonder, as I break my heart at the news, how much more can we take of this kind of stuff in our world? Sometimes escapism is good for us all from time to time before we go insane. | HI Phil
Written by jean.day (2279 comments posted) 20th February 2007 | Powerful poem. I agree with the sentiments expressed.
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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3352 comments posted) 20th February 2007 | This bleak realism and the "soft and fluffy" pieces seem to me to be two halves of the same coin and both pre-suppose a lack of insight or intelligence on the part of the reader. I'm not sure I subscibe to either but hey,that's poetry for you.
sorry if this sounds grumpy
J |
Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 20th February 2007 | No apology needed. Glad it came across as bleak but I certainly didn't intend to suggest any lack of insight or intelligence in anyone who reads it. If that's how it comes across I'm not surprised you 'don't subscribe' and it should be me who says sorry.
Phil. |
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 20th February 2007 | I don't like the question at the end of this - gives it an almost angsty feel imo.
Think I'm with Jane on this one: two extreme perpsectives that both oversimplify the world. After all it's the grey we inhabit.
Had a thought - I reckon this might make a much stronger piece if it were slanted more towards the direction your black and white piece took. i.e. considering the bleak realism and the pink fluff and coming to a middle ground.
Feel free to ignore - jmo after all but you might end up with something more balanced, powerful and ultimately relevant anf thought provoking to the reader as a result.
Some good stuff in this though - I don;t intend to sound as if I'm rubbishing it!
Elli (slightly guilty ) |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3352 comments posted) 20th February 2007 | Course you don't need to apologise for anything you write,phil, heaven forfend. You made an honest statement. I just meant to say of course stuff like that is bad but it is not indicative of anything, it doesn't mean we are all going to hell in a basket. perhaps I drew the wrong inference from it. I'm often on edge when I'm in the poetry forum, like a cat in anothers territory,sorry if I hissed to strongly
cheers
J |
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