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Crush

By Fledermaus

21 February 2007

Would I? Dared I? Could I?
I blurted it out:
" Don't be shocked, but... I have a crush on you."
A pause. Then she replied.
" Don't be shocked also, but..."
I liked her grammatical incorrectness.
" I don't have a crush on you."
I smiled.
" OK. That's fine with me, but I just had to know."
I still think she's cute though.

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Written by Josie (2825 comments posted) 21st February 2007

Ha ha - but all I can say is that she must be mad! Don't give up; just give her time to get used to the idea and try again with just an invitation out. (from your agony aunty).

Written by Snodlander (507 comments posted) 21st February 2007

Oh, fledermaus. You really need to work on those chat-up lines.

I find, "You don't sweat much for a fat lass" breaks the ice.

Written by Fledermaus (3456 comments posted) 22nd February 2007

Thanks Josie and snodlander.

I still haven't got a clue what she thinks of me. After the incident above we still went out together and I was the only male invited to her parties, but recently I haven't heard much from her and I don't dare to ask her again

Written by Phil (6851 comments posted) 22nd February 2007

Enjoyed the sixth line.

I'm with Snodders here. You need some 'direct subtleness.'

Phil

Written by Fledermaus (3456 comments posted) 22nd February 2007

Thanks Phil

How quaint
Written by SJP (7 comments posted) 17th March 2007

I love this! So simple and direct but in just a few short lines the reader really feels the moment. Well created in just a tiny piece!

Written by Fledermaus (3456 comments posted) 19th March 2007

Thanks SJP.
That's how it happened, and, although she rejected me, I was glad she took it so calmly. And at least I know what she thought of me.

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