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By idlemusings
24 June 2005

Friday equals weekends ruse

Thursday night too much booze

Now I have the hangover blues


Down

 

Broken

 

Broken Down

 

This heavy step to life belongs

Might is right, right the wrongs

 

Feed the many starving throngs

Sing along to Geldof's songs

 

Multi-national Third World drains

For politicians just some games

 

Give them water.  Give them grains

Give them all but still remains

 

Broken down

 

Broken

 

Down

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Powerful
Written by LaughterLines (34 comments posted) 26th June 2005
Powerful words indeed and I loved your choice of words in this piece of work. Thanks for sharing it. 
 
LL :)

Written by Cherry26 (10 comments posted) 28th June 2005
I like the progression and regression in this poem a lot. I think the repetition of the Bs and Ds make a nice background sound for what you are saying. Good job.

Written by alandavidpritchard (59 comments posted) 30th June 2005
I prefer the comment box poem at the top; the rest is kinda insubstantial - i know what you are expressing - it just needs more meat and feels too slight for me

Written by idlemusings (80 comments posted) 3rd July 2005
alandavidpritchard - 
 
Couldn't agree more, this bugs me now. I would like to do it again with more thought but I just can't be arsed really. :roll

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