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A Good Read (2)
By no1butClo
22 February 2007
hoping the end's better than before, is 'scrutiny' a bit wrong? It was difficult to find something that worked in the rhythm

any better? If not I'll leave it for a good couple of months, promise...

Come on, read me.
Slip beneath my dust jacket,
between my lines, just like
you think you can.

Split my ink into its colours.
See me spread before you, fragile
as the tissue paper, true hues
laid bare in rings around
my darkened centre -
watch them grow.

Pick my metaphor to bits,
and see each figure of my speech
dismantled to its elements, for
what it's worth.

Pull this unreal character
limb from literary limb, with
sinews of ideas left for a closer
scrutiny - colder than

the page between your fingers.

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Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 22nd February 2007
Much tighter for me. A nice poem - enjoyed it very much. 
 
Oli :)

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 22nd February 2007
Ditto. You seem to have extended the sensuality a little too. 
 
Phil.
Much better
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 23rd February 2007
Much better this time Clo. I enjoyed it. Good subject too.

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