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Dangerous Animals in Edinburgh Zoo |
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By CliffBowes
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23 February 2007 |
I look forward to reading your comments on this.
I look through the bars and I’m glad they are there. These animals are dangerous and stand like a bear.
'Look! There’s a female with cubs by her side,' They look cute and are friendly when only that size.
'Let’s all make a noise to get a reaction.' Look how they start moving – how odd is their traction
I've heard that they kill not for food but for pleasure.
They are cruel, barbaric and slaughter they treasure.
These bars are the best, they're as strong as a tree
For lions need protection when the humans roam free.
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Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 23rd February 2007 | Now that is clever -- I fell for that hook, line and sinker.
Zoos are so depressing. All the dopey people who let their children throw things at the animals' cages, try to get a reaction by banging on windows or shouting or even poking at the animals -- and they are like that in every country I've ever been in.
I think I'd have been tempted to say 'Thank God for these bars, stout and strong as a tree' in the last stanza, but oops -- we're on to religion again, so best to leave that as it is.
Good poem, good idea. |
Written by Kathy (220 comments posted) 23rd February 2007 | I loved this idea and I was duped too so it has obviously worked as both Witzl and I fell for it!
Glad to see that you have gone for the 'far harder' set verse format!!! It is hard to make a constructive crit because I wonder whether I could do any better so I will let more experienced poets have their say. That Phil will have something helpful, he usually does.
Thanks Cliff, I enjoyed it.
Kathy | How I smiled
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 23rd February 2007 | | at your poem. I was in Loro Parque 2 weeks' ago. People eating their lunch, were standing round watching the gorillas who were in turn watching them through a window. I clearly heard one of the gorillas say to the other: "Neighbours is on. Come on, don't miss this episode." As for killing for pleasure - that's for cats and human beings, not for animals who kill for food. |
Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 23rd February 2007 | 'That Phil?' Am I gaining something of a reputation?
Clever but simple piece that makes its point well. Could have had a little more disguise perhaps. Enjoyed it.
Phil. | I thought it was going to be the old jok
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 23rd February 2007 | Mother: what animals did you see at the zoo?
Child: I saw dangeroos
Mother: Dangeroos, don't you mean kangaroos, what did they look like?
Child: They looked like lions to me, but the sign definitely said "THESE ANIMALS ARE DANGEROOS"
hehehehe. The old ones are best.
Nice poem, Cliff
Oli
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Written by fellpony (1616 comments posted) 24th February 2007 | I too thought of the "dangeroos" joke - nice to find it was something else. Living on a farm, we often look at ourselves from the point of view of the animals, whom we picture as saying, "You can't get the staff, you know."
Liked it, Cliff! |
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 26th February 2007 | Time honoured theme but worthy of the repetition for the entertainment value...liked it
Elli |
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